Comment from watergirl

Excellent

Reason becomes a wraith....how interesting. Is this death of openmindedness? I liked your poem a lot, very nice rhyming and reads beautifully. Nice work.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013

Many thanks for your very kind review, Watergirl. Much appreciated! Yes, there is a certain element of that. When people accept a certain faith without question they do perhaps become less open-minded. On the other hand faith in itself is a powerful force in our lives and most people find that narrowing the focus of their minds helps them to concentrate their powers of belief. I think we all have an innate need to believe in something bigger than ourselves.

Comment from SteveY

Excellent

Great job with this one my friend. Followed the format you outlined in the author notes perfectly. But the message was deep and introspective pulling the reader in.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Thanks, Steve, for your complimentary review. Much appreciated.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

And reason soon becomes a wraith
For of God's purpose we are blind.
We now believe with simple faith
These minor myths that fill our mind.

A good Pantoum and good thoughts on this reading. It's hard to believe them all.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Thanks, Gungalo, for reviewing and for your comments.

reply by Gungalo on 11-Dec-2013

Smile.

Comment from colow_201185

Excellent

Pretty slick. I didn't catch the switching of stanzas until the third verse, and initally thought it was weird. Later it became thought provoking. Great topic for this kind of poem. I think I would of had to go back in read some of the lines but you did that for me.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Thanks, Culow_201185, for reviewing and for your comments.

Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel

Excellent

If I am catching the intended meaning of this piece, I agree. At times we Christians fall into the trap of wanting to be able to understand "how it all happened" or "what's it going to look like at the end" so badly that we connect the dots with a few of our own. Then we forget over time what is supposition and what is Gospel. Worse yet are the instances where Christians misrepresent facts to defend something that needs no defense.

I thought this the absolute ideal format for this piece.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Thanks, CtVR, for reviewing and for your comments. There has been a world-wide pandemic of myths down the ages, not only amongst the Christian community.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this pantoum poem about the things that we choose to ponder. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Thanks, Sweetwoodjax, for reviewing and for your comments and good wishes.

Comment from cottoncandy11

Excellent

Hello,

Congratulation on being able to pull off the restrictions of this type of poetry. Your use of words is expressive and tell a tale that is comprehensible.

Regards, CC

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Thanks, CC, for reviewing and for your comments.

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

This piece meets the criteria of the Pantoum poem. This piece has the proper number of stanzas and the proper number of lines within the stanzas. Good end rhyming. Good description. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Many thanks for your succinct review, Righteous Riter.

Comment from pipersfancy

Excellent

Probably will come as no surprise to you that I am fascinated by the writings of Campbell. Myth provides such an important foundational structure to human development throughout the ages. Very interesting pantoum and so well-penned! Good luck in the contest -

PF

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Thanks so much PF. I haven't read much of his work yet, having only recently been introduced to it by another member of this site. Am looking forward to reading more of his writing soon.

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a wonderful piece. The form enhances the poem, I hope that it falls within the contest's rule. The poem is very thought provoking.
Barbara

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013

Thanks very much for your kind review and good wishes, Barbara.