Mango and Bert
A children's story23 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lagace
I am reading this story for the third time and am still asking myself if I like it. And then I realise it is the wrong question. The right one is would I have like it if I were five. If it was my dad telling it to me, the answer to that question would be an enthusiastic YES.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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I am reading this story for the third time and am still asking myself if I like it. And then I realise it is the wrong question. The right one is would I have like it if I were five. If it was my dad telling it to me, the answer to that question would be an enthusiastic YES.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Thank you Jean for that great review. Your response makes a great deal of sense and I appreciate the honesty. John
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Enjoyable story with a very good lesson. Just found two comma errors this time. :)
>> Whoever was "it", had clear
Remove the comma, since it separates the subject from its predicate... bin no-no.
>> and Bert * with his great big paws, would push
Insert another comma after BERT to set off the modifying phrase. If you do not, then you have the same error as the first one.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Enjoyable story with a very good lesson. Just found two comma errors this time. :)
>> Whoever was "it", had clear
Remove the comma, since it separates the subject from its predicate... bin no-no.
>> and Bert * with his great big paws, would push
Insert another comma after BERT to set off the modifying phrase. If you do not, then you have the same error as the first one.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Thank you Phyllis for taking the time to read and review this story. Also for the comma corrections. I thought I had it.
I owe you a bunch of reviews. You post faster then I can keep up.
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You don't owe me anything. :)
Comment from Capricorn61
This is a lovely childrens story and I very much agree with your warning. In the modern world one can never be too careful where children are concerned.
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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This is a lovely childrens story and I very much agree with your warning. In the modern world one can never be too careful where children are concerned.
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Comment Written 05-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Thank you Capricorn for stopping to read and review. Encouraging words, always appreciated. John