The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Big Day Getting Closer"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
39 total reviews
Comment from harleyangelbrat
Your story is really sweet and seems to be a real happily ever after story so far. I really enjoyed reading it very much. God bless you!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Your story is really sweet and seems to be a real happily ever after story so far. I really enjoyed reading it very much. God bless you!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thanks friend. This is a larger chapter that has been divided up thanks to some good advice from FS Writers. Hopefully you saw Chapter 19 as well that goes right along with it. We will be offering m ore carrots and stuff for reviewing when I get done editing and so on real soon.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Very interesting story of the impending meeting and the way you wove God into the writing. I too think my husband and I were hand picked by God. Four children later and I don't doubt it a bit. Great inside view.
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Very interesting story of the impending meeting and the way you wove God into the writing. I too think my husband and I were hand picked by God. Four children later and I don't doubt it a bit. Great inside view.
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Thanks very much enjoying the Rory story as I can get to it ok! Check out some of my other chapters ok! Sadly we were unable to have kiddies but unlike a lot of my family we are still together ands loving it after 27 years.
Comment from Sheik S. Peer
A happy story, could be easier to read with less superfluity, as you say yourself.
Question re sentence below: 'tome' is this a typo and you may have meant town?
In other places in this tome you will have already read about
we began to contact various persons ( rather than persons...I believe people should be used as people is the plural of person)
One of the ladies had dived into a swimming pool on the shallow end, and broken her neck.
suggestion: ( One of the women dove into a swimming pool at the shallow end, and broke her neck.)
I found all capitals in some sentences, distracting and not necessary. A life worth living is a life worth sharing, so thanks for sharing. Best wishes with your future writing.
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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A happy story, could be easier to read with less superfluity, as you say yourself.
Question re sentence below: 'tome' is this a typo and you may have meant town?
In other places in this tome you will have already read about
we began to contact various persons ( rather than persons...I believe people should be used as people is the plural of person)
One of the ladies had dived into a swimming pool on the shallow end, and broken her neck.
suggestion: ( One of the women dove into a swimming pool at the shallow end, and broke her neck.)
I found all capitals in some sentences, distracting and not necessary. A life worth living is a life worth sharing, so thanks for sharing. Best wishes with your future writing.
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Hi new friend, I appreciate you coming by for a look at this chapter. I has kinda grown a bit like Topsy if you remember that saying. I hope you came in after I added the You tube file for the Video of the lady singing the song. I did have a taped version of an organ rendition of the song I would have rather added but I can't find it. "Dove" my friend is an American perversion, sorry. Same as a lot of other things the Yanks and the Rebels have done to English except fortunately in Boston. I also hoped you had come in after I just went through and removed a lot of other superfluity as advised from a long time Reviewer who I have had on board ever since I first came to FS. I will look at the cpaitals and see what I can do. Thanks for coming by I had added a lot more to this chapter I thought I had done before, but missed. I may even yet, decided to break it up again...as my book gets bigger and bigger. I am glad you have come along now as the book is a lot more in sequence and correct time wise as to events and when they happened in my life. I had a lot more pictures I will add to the LIVE version that FS won't allow in here sadly. I welcome your comments if you would like to go back to the beginning only as you have time. I will have a look for your work in here as well as I like to help others as they have helped me. God Bless.
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Sorry I forgot to answer your query on the word 'tome' this word is probably a slang term for 'book' hope that clears that up. One thing about all the writers and reviewers in FS we all come from different parts of the world and we all "spruk" hehe differently. Just as in America you all drive on the wrong side of the road hehe and leave out double letters when adding ing to a wor etc. I have even been ciritiscised (sp?) for incorrect rhyming in a poem or Christmas Carol I have on here all becvause of the way words are pronounced in America as oppsed to how we 'sae' it hehe in Australia. Sorry for the superfluity of reply. Cheers again.
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I am not American. I am Canadian but live in Britain for 15 years. Had to learn British english. cheers as they say over here.
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Hi thanks for getting back. Appreciate your input. Always listening hard to the actors when they say "aboot" for about hehe that tells me they ain't American they's Canadian hehe!
Comment from CR Delport
This is quite an interesting story that is well and flows nicely. The only nits I have, is the overuse of words like "very" and "a bit" and "really". Overall, good job.
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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This is quite an interesting story that is well and flows nicely. The only nits I have, is the overuse of words like "very" and "a bit" and "really". Overall, good job.
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Hi friend you were one of my earliest reviewers . Have not seen you for ages. Thanks I will look into your 'nits' ok! have to look and see if I can check out your stuff have not seen anything of yours in ages.
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Thanks again for pointing out all the "superfluity" of jibber jabber as I have mentioned in the current edit. Have a look again if you wanbt found some more things myself on my return hehe.
Comment from seaglass
What a nice big church. This was a beautiful wedding and the two of you were radiant. I wish we had film of our wedding. It was smaller and in a chapel rather than a big church. But we've been together since September 1987. About the same amount of time.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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What a nice big church. This was a beautiful wedding and the two of you were radiant. I wish we had film of our wedding. It was smaller and in a chapel rather than a big church. But we've been together since September 1987. About the same amount of time.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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yeah well we have had a long happy marriage for sure thanks again for the great review.
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You probably have seen the promotion but I have just done edit 10 to this chapoter if you care to look again added a bunch of stuff I had left out before.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is another interesting chapter to add to the collection that the author has created with this piece of writing. It is nice to see somebody progressing with their life.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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This is another interesting chapter to add to the collection that the author has created with this piece of writing. It is nice to see somebody progressing with their life.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Yep happily married 27 years come march 2014
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gGreat news. I still have to take that step.
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You probably have seen the promotion but I have just done edit 10 to this chapoter if you care to look again added a bunch of stuff I had left out before.
Comment from barkingdog
In the last paragraph, I was curious about the CD that upset Louise. What was it? What tunes upset her? It would be good to add that information.
I love the story of your meeting and marrying Louise. It was an amazing series of circumstances that let up to it all. God had his plan for both of you. I like that you put your faith forward and show the reader that all good things come to those who wait and trust in the lord.
Fine editing, Sankey.
I found a few more things, mostly typos:
-Three weeks prior to our marriage, (I) moved into the flat,
- and to[] help me get ready, as[] our Best Man.
- to see us married(,) and we had a reception of [] 112 guests.
- so( )we were able to finally get
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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In the last paragraph, I was curious about the CD that upset Louise. What was it? What tunes upset her? It would be good to add that information.
I love the story of your meeting and marrying Louise. It was an amazing series of circumstances that let up to it all. God had his plan for both of you. I like that you put your faith forward and show the reader that all good things come to those who wait and trust in the lord.
Fine editing, Sankey.
I found a few more things, mostly typos:
-Three weeks prior to our marriage, (I) moved into the flat,
- and to[] help me get ready, as[] our Best Man.
- to see us married(,) and we had a reception of [] 112 guests.
- so( )we were able to finally get
Comment Written 09-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the fine review and I amso glad you like the faith being shown. I will get to those spags soon and thanks for that. Had a real time yesterday trying to get the lines not to break up, grrr. Let you know when I get it fixed, again thanks so much for picking these up.
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G'day I just did 3 more edits to this if you would like to drop by and look again. Seem to get continuing problems with short lines. let me know what you think and it has changed in placesd as well.
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You probably have seen the promotion but I have just done edit 10 to this chapoter if you care to look again added a bunch of stuff I had left out before.
Comment from James W. A.
Although I missed the early parts of your book here, I enjoyed this part nonetheless. It made me chuckle in some parts and feel emotion in others and it is very well written. Great job!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Although I missed the early parts of your book here, I enjoyed this part nonetheless. It made me chuckle in some parts and feel emotion in others and it is very well written. Great job!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Thanks James. 'Barking dog' pojnted out some new spags I have to work on and as I said above, I had a real time of fixing the lines yesterday to get break of breaks and spaces in the lines.
Appreciate your review thanks.
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You probably have seen the promotion but I have just done edit 10 to this chapter if you care to look again added a bunch of stuff I had left out before.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, sankey, you did an excellent job writing this chapter explaining the way God prepared your heart for louise years before you were married. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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this is very well written, sankey, you did an excellent job writing this chapter explaining the way God prepared your heart for louise years before you were married. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much haven't seen you around for a while where ya bin? Appreciate the review. I had a good friend point out a bunch of Spags that a lot of reviewers and me missed before so it was good you came and looked it over again today.
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my mother died and i haven't been on the website too much since thursday
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Sorry to hear that I hope she went peacefully. Thoughts and prayers are with you friend.
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i wrote two poems about it on my portfolio==I Was Surprised and He Married Her
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G'day I just did 3 more edits to this if you would like to drop by and look again. Seem to get continuing problems with short lines. let me know what you think and it has changed in placesd as well
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You probably have seen the promotion but I have just done edit 10 to this chapter if you care to look again added a bunch of stuff I had left out before.
Comment from 22allgood
This is a wonderful happy story of how you met Louise. I liked reading about the events that led up to it. It is a good read.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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This is a wonderful happy story of how you met Louise. I liked reading about the events that led up to it. It is a good read.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much for the lovely review. People don't realize what they have missed not getting to know my wife, Sis. She used to be very accepting and open and friendly, while shy, but so much rejecton had destroyed all that. We accepted each other that was the reason we did and still do so well. I guess this is public too but I don't care.
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G'day I just did 3 more edits to this if you would like to drop by and look again. Seem to get continuing problems with short lines. let me know what you think and it has changed in placesd as well