Poems from a Pensive Poet
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Final Farewell"Verses from my heart
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Comment from Cindy Warren
That's enough to make me cry. I feel so bad for the families of the soldiers. Most are so young, and they have to find a way to move forward. That's easier said than done. Nice job. You really make the reader feel for Susan and her lost love.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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That's enough to make me cry. I feel so bad for the families of the soldiers. Most are so young, and they have to find a way to move forward. That's easier said than done. Nice job. You really make the reader feel for Susan and her lost love.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you Cindy. I really appreciate your review and comments. Yes, it is sad. War is horrible but it seems there comes a time young men must go to fight. The loved ones left behind are the ones who suffer the most mental anguish.
Beth
Comment from Alankrita
Very well written. Touching and sweet. I wrote something kind of similar, not a poem, a flash fiction, where the girl's fiance died as a soldier. So having written about the topic I can say for sure how well expressed the emotions are. Wonderful work.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Very well written. Touching and sweet. I wrote something kind of similar, not a poem, a flash fiction, where the girl's fiance died as a soldier. So having written about the topic I can say for sure how well expressed the emotions are. Wonderful work.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and your encouraging words. I do appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from lindalcreel
Absolutely loved this!. The picture was powerful, as was the writing. What a beautiful way to honor a loved one. Perhaps she will see him again, in the afterlife. This was a very poignant and touching poem. Great job. I wish you the best of luck in this contest. This poem is a winner!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Absolutely loved this!. The picture was powerful, as was the writing. What a beautiful way to honor a loved one. Perhaps she will see him again, in the afterlife. This was a very poignant and touching poem. Great job. I wish you the best of luck in this contest. This poem is a winner!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and wonderful comments. I'm so glad you liked this. I appreciate your good wishes as well.
Beth
Comment from dmt1967
Does that mean he died at war or he came back a different man this is a sad but often true story my friend very well told thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Does that mean he died at war or he came back a different man this is a sad but often true story my friend very well told thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review. The picture shows a soldier kneeling by his wife but he is transparent and appears to be a spirit. The poem is meant to indicate that he returned only in spirit. His body would have come back for interment.
Beth
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, beth, you did an excellent job wiritng this beautiful, heartfelt poem about the soldier saying goodbye for the last time. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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this is very well written, beth, you did an excellent job wiritng this beautiful, heartfelt poem about the soldier saying goodbye for the last time. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments and good wishes. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Beth
Comment from Martin Chan
The final farewell is a nicely composed poem written about the fallen heroes and illustrating the feelings of his wife left behind in sorrow and tears. Nice choice of words and a very good presentation that it could move the reader's heart.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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The final farewell is a nicely composed poem written about the fallen heroes and illustrating the feelings of his wife left behind in sorrow and tears. Nice choice of words and a very good presentation that it could move the reader's heart.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review Martin. I appreciate you comments.
Beth
Comment from DanielEkine
Beautifully written and well executed. Really touching.
"Her Buddy's gone, and he can't come back.
The war's claimed another brave life.
"Don't fear, sweetheart. I will return." was
the promise he made to his wife.
He kept the promise he made that day,
but how can he let Susan know?
He longs to comfort his grieving wife
and stop all the tears in their flow." my best part.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Beautifully written and well executed. Really touching.
"Her Buddy's gone, and he can't come back.
The war's claimed another brave life.
"Don't fear, sweetheart. I will return." was
the promise he made to his wife.
He kept the promise he made that day,
but how can he let Susan know?
He longs to comfort his grieving wife
and stop all the tears in their flow." my best part.
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much, Daniel. I really appreciate your review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Gungalo
This is a beautiful write Beth and it really is the way it is. No one is guaranteed life on this earth. Sigh.
He can't be a part of the present
and she must not live in the past.
The final farewell isn't easy
but nothing on earth's meant to last.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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This is a beautiful write Beth and it really is the way it is. No one is guaranteed life on this earth. Sigh.
He can't be a part of the present
and she must not live in the past.
The final farewell isn't easy
but nothing on earth's meant to last.
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you, Gungalo. I really appreciate the review and your nice comments.
Beth
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