The Macadoo's
Boy finds something weird in neighbor's basement.26 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh man, this should be a contest entry! Creepy and really, really well-told. I am such a fan of your writing! Your narrative is smooth, the plot rich and the dialogue so real, your characters feel like people I know. Not a thing out of place - publish ready, as far as I can tell...
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Oh man, this should be a contest entry! Creepy and really, really well-told. I am such a fan of your writing! Your narrative is smooth, the plot rich and the dialogue so real, your characters feel like people I know. Not a thing out of place - publish ready, as far as I can tell...
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful rating and the nice comments. I am always glad to hear from you. Gretchen
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It is my pleasure, Gretchen. Dawn
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Cw. I've not read much of your work before, but I guess I'd better start because I found this a pleasure to read. Great use of imagery for instance:
"What I saw next, is really hard to describe. A man, some six feet tall was seated in a chair. His skin, like leather, was firm and shiny brown. Fingers splayed on the arm rests. He looked like he was made of polished wood.
Humor is spread thick throughout and your dialogue is impeccable. Bravo! (ps. I would hope you might check out my book and see what you think also, considering what a good writer you are. Thanks...Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Hi, Cw. I've not read much of your work before, but I guess I'd better start because I found this a pleasure to read. Great use of imagery for instance:
"What I saw next, is really hard to describe. A man, some six feet tall was seated in a chair. His skin, like leather, was firm and shiny brown. Fingers splayed on the arm rests. He looked like he was made of polished wood.
Humor is spread thick throughout and your dialogue is impeccable. Bravo! (ps. I would hope you might check out my book and see what you think also, considering what a good writer you are. Thanks...Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the stellar rating. I really appreciate it. I will check out your writings once the tourist season starts to wind down. It is too hard to keep up with long projects at the present time. Thank you again. Gretchen
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Thanks, Gretchen. I can't help but notice you post two items a day sometimes....you must be very busy indeed. Bob
Comment from Eigle Rull
Wow! This was a very well written little piece of work. It was exciting and it definitely held my attention very tightly. The storyline was great, and so was the dialog. I found no errors at all. I enjoyed reading this piece very much. It was excellent my friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Wow! This was a very well written little piece of work. It was exciting and it definitely held my attention very tightly. The storyline was great, and so was the dialog. I found no errors at all. I enjoyed reading this piece very much. It was excellent my friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. I appreciate it very much. Gretchen
Comment from Rondeno
Yes, great fun. It really evokes that world of 60's and 70's summer vacations, and young teens having "adventures". Good story, Gretchen.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Yes, great fun. It really evokes that world of 60's and 70's summer vacations, and young teens having "adventures". Good story, Gretchen.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Imagine having an adventure without your trusty cell phone. I think I like writing about this time if only for that reason. LOL> thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from SteveY
Great story. Had me intrigued and on the edge of my seat the whole time I was reading it. Very imaginative and suspenseful. Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Great story. Had me intrigued and on the edge of my seat the whole time I was reading it. Very imaginative and suspenseful. Wonderful job.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Alankrita
scary. freaky. well written, gave me goosebumps. characterization is good, the plot is nice, though a little used.
what is missing is the details. the creak of a floorboard, the sound of a mouse flitting past that send us to panic mode, stuff like that. all horror stories need a freaky atmosphere. good story, overall.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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scary. freaky. well written, gave me goosebumps. characterization is good, the plot is nice, though a little used.
what is missing is the details. the creak of a floorboard, the sound of a mouse flitting past that send us to panic mode, stuff like that. all horror stories need a freaky atmosphere. good story, overall.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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I don't ever do a lot of details. I have always like the reader to make their own details and run with them. I do appreciate the comments though. Thank you for the wonderful review. Gretchen