Silver Threads
A (modified) Shakespearean sonnet of cursed enchantment94 total reviews
Comment from Caressa_08
Have to definitely bookmark this one, once I realize how on this site, that I returned to, yet again,, discovering this poem that I so appreciate & can see your talent abounds with this one.....Best wishes, your way...
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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Have to definitely bookmark this one, once I realize how on this site, that I returned to, yet again,, discovering this poem that I so appreciate & can see your talent abounds with this one.....Best wishes, your way...
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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aah, are you new Caressa? if so, welcome! I've learned such a lot from this site! Blessings for your lovely six - so much appreciated!
Best wishes
Sharyn
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No, I took a long break, because I have a lot of business to take care of here where I live....And, my real name is similar to yours...Marilyn...Though, I wish it was Caressa.
Comment from trevorletang
Hi Visionary1234. I sure enjoyed your Shakespearean sonnet. Thanks for the detailed and educational nuanced notes on the construction of such poem. Yours is a model of your exposition. The story in Shakespearean language and sonnet is well matched to the image for the competition.
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Hi Visionary1234. I sure enjoyed your Shakespearean sonnet. Thanks for the detailed and educational nuanced notes on the construction of such poem. Yours is a model of your exposition. The story in Shakespearean language and sonnet is well matched to the image for the competition.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Trevor! :)Sharyn
Comment from Taffspride
I hope everyone reads this aloud Sharyn. It sounds so well. It is a tragic sonnet, written in the best Shakespearean style.
I liked it so very much I read it aloud several times to savor it.
Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Iechyd da
Ann.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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I hope everyone reads this aloud Sharyn. It sounds so well. It is a tragic sonnet, written in the best Shakespearean style.
I liked it so very much I read it aloud several times to savor it.
Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Iechyd da
Ann.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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Bless you, Ann - it does rather lend itself to being 'declaimed', doesn't it? Glad you had fun with it my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Gloria ....
Hey Visionary, that is a good sonnet read in perfect iambs that definitely has incorporated the painting into the text. One thing I'm wondering, is this a new type of sonnet? Lord knows I'm a real new kid on the block regarding the form so am not an expert by any stretch of the imagination.
It seems to me your rhyme scheme is ABAB, CDCD, CACA, EE. Anyway let me know if I have that wrong because I always love learning new things.
Best luck in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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Hey Visionary, that is a good sonnet read in perfect iambs that definitely has incorporated the painting into the text. One thing I'm wondering, is this a new type of sonnet? Lord knows I'm a real new kid on the block regarding the form so am not an expert by any stretch of the imagination.
It seems to me your rhyme scheme is ABAB, CDCD, CACA, EE. Anyway let me know if I have that wrong because I always love learning new things.
Best luck in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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You're absolutely correct, Gloria! I amended my notes! I did a lot of revisions and totally forgot that I'd modified the rhyme scheme! bless your eagle eyes! :)S
Comment from Terry wrote
This is a wonderful, eerie example of the sonnet, perfectly written to tell the story with an unexpected ending. Well done, and a good explanation for others to follow. Thank you for sharing this!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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This is a wonderful, eerie example of the sonnet, perfectly written to tell the story with an unexpected ending. Well done, and a good explanation for others to follow. Thank you for sharing this!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Terry! :)Sharyn
Comment from Quillian
What a great piece of work, here. I love the sound it makes when I read it out loud. The line I like the best and the one that gives it an archaic feel for me is 'But with the Captains daughter you did lie". I also liked your last two lines where your silver thread has become cursed and the narrator would have both drowned and at the bottom of the sea.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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What a great piece of work, here. I love the sound it makes when I read it out loud. The line I like the best and the one that gives it an archaic feel for me is 'But with the Captains daughter you did lie". I also liked your last two lines where your silver thread has become cursed and the narrator would have both drowned and at the bottom of the sea.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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oh you really followed me on this one, I can see that - thank you so much my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Bryon1248
This is such a well penned sonnet indeed.. Loved the subject, the extremely well worded and descriptive content, the flow and rhyme was excellent whilst keeping to the constraints of the structure
I also appreciated your explanation of this style in the comments section, I have only ever penned two sonnets and know the complexity involved
Thank you for sharing this write
Take care
Bryon
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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This is such a well penned sonnet indeed.. Loved the subject, the extremely well worded and descriptive content, the flow and rhyme was excellent whilst keeping to the constraints of the structure
I also appreciated your explanation of this style in the comments section, I have only ever penned two sonnets and know the complexity involved
Thank you for sharing this write
Take care
Bryon
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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thank you so much Bryon! :)Sharyn
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
You are indeed a master of the Shakespearian sonnet.
A clever tale unfolds with ease and interest.
I like the twist and hint of revenge in the last two lines.
Very well written with mastery and finesse.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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You are indeed a master of the Shakespearian sonnet.
A clever tale unfolds with ease and interest.
I like the twist and hint of revenge in the last two lines.
Very well written with mastery and finesse.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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oh a huge 'thank you' for your wonderful six on this one! The picture just seemed to lend itself to tragedy, didn't it? I'm so glad you enjoyed it my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from SaluteDobby
This was a beautiful sonnet and you did a really good job of the writing prompt. The story of a woman betrayed and her fury at this infidelity was wonderfully expressed in this short poem.
Well done; and all the best with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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This was a beautiful sonnet and you did a really good job of the writing prompt. The story of a woman betrayed and her fury at this infidelity was wonderfully expressed in this short poem.
Well done; and all the best with the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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love your name!!
Thank you so much for reviewing and enjoying my piece, my dear!
blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Lulube
My word, no it's your words. You must have alot of study time in for Shakespearean sonnets. To have the story line with rhymes but in a specific manner, with specific amount of verses then end in a couplet, I'm overwhelmed. A much deserving 6 stars.
lulube
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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My word, no it's your words. You must have alot of study time in for Shakespearean sonnets. To have the story line with rhymes but in a specific manner, with specific amount of verses then end in a couplet, I'm overwhelmed. A much deserving 6 stars.
lulube
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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woo-hoo! Thank you so much Lu! Actually I've written only about half a dozen sonnets in my lifetime - the first one took a lot more work, but they do get easier after a while, thank goodness. Bless you for your lovely six on this one lu!
:)Sharyn
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welcome enjoyed
lulube
