All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Sticky-notes"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from TKField
Well, you said a mouthful. This has a lot of words in it, and they are full of some kind of emotions directed at other people and sticky notes seem to be involved. There's a lot of imagery and talk soup. This reminds me of a cocaine binge I went on once where I couldn't quit talking a blue streak, and everything sounded like genius, but what I was talking about was anyone's guess. Very wordy and descriptive though.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Well, you said a mouthful. This has a lot of words in it, and they are full of some kind of emotions directed at other people and sticky notes seem to be involved. There's a lot of imagery and talk soup. This reminds me of a cocaine binge I went on once where I couldn't quit talking a blue streak, and everything sounded like genius, but what I was talking about was anyone's guess. Very wordy and descriptive though.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Well, dear heart, maybe one day you'll be as wordy and descriptive in your reviews perhaps - dare we hope??? May I suggest, that if you're going to review a piece, you REALLY put a brain into it. "This has a lot of words in it" isn't exactly cerebrally challenging material, ok? In fact, it's just plain rude to collect $$ and not do me the courtesy of being genuine. That's not what the site is about, ok?
Best wishes
Sharyn
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I do apologize sharyn. Yes, it's true, sometimes I mail it in. It's unavoidable really, if you want to accumulate the kind of dough to promote your stuff anywhere around here. If I wrote a well thought out and articulated response to everything, I'd be reviewing till next year to boost one stinking thing. You're right, I wouldn't have gone near this if it hadn't been on top of the first page, but neither would hardly anyone else, and you know it. That's why you promote to the top of the first page in the first place.. Besides, I'm already on double secret probation for writing overly critical comments. More than one of my "genuine" reviews have been pulled as personal attacks. Then I get a nasty message from the commissars of propriety, and then I get muted. Still, I'm sorry you feel I stiffed you on the feedback. You may have a "genuine" review upon request, but I would strongly suggest letting the matter drop. Much better all the way around. Trust me, you don't want one of my genuine reviews, and I promise not to send any more non-genuine reviews eitherā?¦.TKF
Comment from Winslow
Dear Visionary,
This is a sad love poem for the person has lost the one he/she loves. Poignant and well expressed.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Visionary,
This is a sad love poem for the person has lost the one he/she loves. Poignant and well expressed.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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thx so much Winslow! :)Sharyn
Comment from Jade Lawson
I enjoyed the originality of this poem for this contest. Good luck. I think I see myself in this poem, at least in the first part. Although I write a lot about love, it's only a project, I don't have love in my life and don't even look for it. Indeed, I don't even recommend myself to anyone, however, indeed for the majority of people, everyone knows that love is a risk and hurts but everyone looks for it. I could feel the loneliness and pain felt by the character that love left in her life. I liked the descriptions, flow and word choice. Great artwork.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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I enjoyed the originality of this poem for this contest. Good luck. I think I see myself in this poem, at least in the first part. Although I write a lot about love, it's only a project, I don't have love in my life and don't even look for it. Indeed, I don't even recommend myself to anyone, however, indeed for the majority of people, everyone knows that love is a risk and hurts but everyone looks for it. I could feel the loneliness and pain felt by the character that love left in her life. I liked the descriptions, flow and word choice. Great artwork.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Bless you Angel! :)Sharyn
Comment from jgirlie152
This is an excellent unique poem and if I hadn't lived it myself I would not have believed just how your feelings are regarding the incidents you mention, and then the quietness after all is done. We all love our solitude when life is busy and a peaceful interim is appreciated. However, the very sound of QUIET is something different altogether.
Excellent free verse.
Joan
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This is an excellent unique poem and if I hadn't lived it myself I would not have believed just how your feelings are regarding the incidents you mention, and then the quietness after all is done. We all love our solitude when life is busy and a peaceful interim is appreciated. However, the very sound of QUIET is something different altogether.
Excellent free verse.
Joan
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Love your six! Thank you so much for your appreciation Joan.
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a terrific contest entry, Sharyn. The use of enjambment is some of the best I've ever read. Your images are startling, and your 'voice' powerful and direct. I'd be very suprised if you don't place very well in this contest. Good luck!
Warmest regards, Bev
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This is a terrific contest entry, Sharyn. The use of enjambment is some of the best I've ever read. Your images are startling, and your 'voice' powerful and direct. I'd be very suprised if you don't place very well in this contest. Good luck!
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Bless you Bev! :))Sharyn
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:0) xx
Comment from Charlene0513
To visionary1234,
A poem addressing the confines of your world as you know it to be when only mere remnants leave a void; emptiness in your life that will never be the same.
Many uses of alliteration found and metaphors used.
Charlene
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To visionary1234,
A poem addressing the confines of your world as you know it to be when only mere remnants leave a void; emptiness in your life that will never be the same.
Many uses of alliteration found and metaphors used.
Charlene
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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thank you so much Charlene! :)Sharyn
Comment from justchillin
Amazing poetry. Beautifully written, and every line gives something to the written. great talent, a real pleasure to read,thank you so much x
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Amazing poetry. Beautifully written, and every line gives something to the written. great talent, a real pleasure to read,thank you so much x
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thx so much chill! :)Sharyn
Comment from Val Crisson
What a wonderful, two sided view of love! I really enjoyed this poem, and yet it left me wondering "was the sticky note worth" the rest of the physical an emotional mess. I like to left a thought and not an answer. Very well written as always, plus a great lay out and very good imagery.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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What a wonderful, two sided view of love! I really enjoyed this poem, and yet it left me wondering "was the sticky note worth" the rest of the physical an emotional mess. I like to left a thought and not an answer. Very well written as always, plus a great lay out and very good imagery.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much Val! :)Sharyn
Comment from McMurry903
This is a fabulous free verse poem, Sharyn. I love the reflective thoughts on things that once were. Silence can be much more painful than tons of racket at times.... Very well done, my friend!
:)Brian
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This is a fabulous free verse poem, Sharyn. I love the reflective thoughts on things that once were. Silence can be much more painful than tons of racket at times.... Very well done, my friend!
:)Brian
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much Brian! :)Sharyn
Comment from Kingsland
This is an outstanding piece of poetic art. It has such great emotional poetic thoughts in its words. This just oozes poetic verve with every line. This was everything an outstanding piece of poetic art should be and more... John
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This is an outstanding piece of poetic art. It has such great emotional poetic thoughts in its words. This just oozes poetic verve with every line. This was everything an outstanding piece of poetic art should be and more... John
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Wow! John! A six from you is to be treasured, my friend! Thank you so much!
Blessings,
Sharyn