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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from nancyjam
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Yep. wish I knew too. Your poem raises some
good questions in a wonderfully poetic way.
Lots of imaginative imagery in your questions.
though provoking as well as a good read.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
    thx so much nancy! :)S
Comment from ~Dovey
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This is beautiful, visionary. I love the picture you chose for illustration. Your internal and external rhyme make this piece exceptionally smooth in flow and cadence to the ear. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
    and thank you again! :)Sharyn
Comment from Pili Pubul
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I ask myself the same questions, so I love the honesty and true
desire to know. I will love to be surprised and sit among all that
I loved eternally . What I am sure is that regardless of religious faith
Or any other belief , it will be the same for all . Challenging poem
very well written. Pili. (Wish I had six stars,great poem )

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
    thank you so much Pili - I really appreciate your thoughtful review! :)Sharyn
reply by Pili Pubul on 05-Apr-2013
    You are so welcome. Pili
Comment from GWHARGIS
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Seems there are no sixes that I am able to give you. Hope you know how this affected me. I love the what if's of this. I do trust that there is a great reward out there. Even the floating in space seems a nice peaceful reward. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
    Bless you my dear - maybe we'll float by each other, lit in glory and hopefully not bored! :))))Sharyn
Comment from Leineco
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I love this poem :-) I love the reference to that pit of the stomach thing at the start of a roller coaster ride and linking it to the the gut check of what is next. I love the reference to keeping score...the inevitable question of whether our actions really count against us, or whether there really is no thereafter. And I adore the lines "and what do I do, drifting in space
with a smile on my face, racing to nowhere"
I often contemplate the intrinsic value of the glory in life after death spent adoring - sounds boring!
Great poem...I really enjoyed reading it :-)

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
    you're on my wave-length precisely Leineco! bless you! :)Sharyn
Comment from AnonymousWisdom
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This is very well written.
Great structure of stanzas.
Flowed well, was easy to read.
Loved the topic, it was thought-provoking.
Great job and thanks for sharing! :)

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
    I'm so glad you liked this one A.W. - and a huge THANK YOU for your lovely six!
    :)))Sharyn
Comment from EMB
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Okay, Sharyn, you went kind of zany with this one, but it made me smile throughout, so I ain't mad atcha! LOL By the way, I'd say you'd "float like a butterfly," not a fairy. :D

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
    didn't want to OD on the butterfly metaphor Ed - three times in one short poem would be too much perhaps?????
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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I am responding to your well-written, thought-provoking poem and the question in the notes. I thank God that I know what's going to happen to me when I draw my last breath. Not knowing would be really scary.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
    Bless you Janice! :)Sharyn
Comment from angelface2
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What a lovely poem. one butterfly breath between life and death. Yes... We must trust, because I don't want to know what's next. Miss Sally

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
    thank you so much Miss Sally! :)Sharyn
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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life and death
are
one butterfly breath
apart ...

You are so right

a lovely poem, my friend -- it does leave us wondering, but do we really want to know what happens -- particularly if it's not good.

Margaret

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
    my point exactly Margaret - thank you my dear! :)Sharyn