Comment from GeraldS

Excellent

This is a well written narrative. The story is engaging and flows effortlessly. The dialogue is believable. The piece stands well on its own as a sort of 'slice of life' story. It was pleasant to read and review.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks Gerald - I appreciate you reading and your kind words. Bill

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Most of the old houses were long on people and short on bathrooms. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks Charlie - the old house this was based on had one bathroom. Of course, your second choice was the outhouse which was still operational. Bill

Comment from Cariboubill

Exceptional

What a little rogue Rabbit is! Erin seems to be a healthy young lady, too. I laughed plenty about the open bathroom door. Great final conversation, "Me too, Erin, me too." I remember being that age!
...Bill

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

With as many brain cells that I've killed, it's a miracle that I remember that age. Thanks for reading and for the wonderful compliment of the six. I appreciate both! Bill

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

My grandparent's lake - grandparents' lake - plural possessive
vivid description of setting
I'm not sure which delights me more - the incident with naked Erin or the story of how by eating a tomato sandwich, Rabbit has actually eaten some of the cow/worm poop LOL
I just love Virge and Rabbit and every single adventure they have together. I'd give this a six, but I'm out of them. Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks Brooke. I appreciate your help and the virtual six! Regards, Bill

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

From the previous chapter, I had an inkling something would happen between Erin & Rabbit. I liked how played it simple and sweet in the same manner as the rest of the story.
Another good chapter...
John

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading John. I appreciate you following the story. Regards, Bill

Comment from CR Delport

Exceptional

What a lovely chapter. I think out of all the chapters I read so far, this was one of the best. Wonderfully written. They sure had some fun that three days. Looking forward to the next.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks for your kind words and the compliment of the six! Warm regards, Bill

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, bhogg, you did an excellent job writing this chapter about the fishing trip and rabbit seeing erin naked, i enjoyed reading this one...

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thank you for reading and for folliwing the story. I appreciate both. Bill

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

I enjoyed this episode - I am a very irregular reader of your book.
As it stands, the relationship between rabbit and erin is a little confusing, but your notes help.
Clever introduction of extra background on Rabbit's early years.
Nice.

Steve

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks Steve - one of the challenges of writing a novel that you release as a serial. Thanks for stopping by. The previous chapter that introduces Erin still has some points on it, I think. Regards, Bill

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

storytelling is one word

An interesting and fun story. So many humorous little stories and makes me think how relaxed life used to be. I enjoyed this much. Your dialogue is great~Debbie

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks Debbie - I appreciate you reading. Life really was simpler. How did we survive without i-pods and video games? Pretty well, I think. Bill

Comment from Eigle Rull

Excellent

A wonderful little piece about family life on the farm, and growing up. This was a cute little piece with no errors that I could find. It was written well with easy to understand wording. It held my interest for sure. Good job, in my opinion.

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 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thank you for your kind words! Bill