Rabbit
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Fighting and Family"A Boy's Story of the rural South
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Comment from beccabootie123
I wish I had a seven!! this was so good, need to read more. the flies brought me back, we got paid to catch japanese beetles off the hedges they were destroying. a penny a piece and the word nigger, we used it as a regular word not derogatory in any way. and when we said it, it did not cause fights. well written, formatted well could picture everything, now I need to go back and start from the beginning. really good
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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I wish I had a seven!! this was so good, need to read more. the flies brought me back, we got paid to catch japanese beetles off the hedges they were destroying. a penny a piece and the word nigger, we used it as a regular word not derogatory in any way. and when we said it, it did not cause fights. well written, formatted well could picture everything, now I need to go back and start from the beginning. really good
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you very much for reading and your kind review. I hope you do get a chance to circle back and read some prior chapters. Bill
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I absolutely plan too
Comment from GWHARGIS
I just love this story. Rabbit and his view of things is so breath taking and real. He knows there's trouble out in the big world but he knows he can only take care of his little bit. I got a lump in my throat when Virge was telling about his little brother. Nicely done, again.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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I just love this story. Rabbit and his view of things is so breath taking and real. He knows there's trouble out in the big world but he knows he can only take care of his little bit. I got a lump in my throat when Virge was telling about his little brother. Nicely done, again.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you very much for reading and your most kind and generous review! Bill
Comment from humpwhistle
Nice job, Bill. I'm really fond of your characters (except maybe John). Every installment brings me back to simpler time. Keep it going.
Peace, Lee
Virge was in the process of filling...
Bill, why not simplify:
Virge filled his pipe...?
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Nice job, Bill. I'm really fond of your characters (except maybe John). Every installment brings me back to simpler time. Keep it going.
Peace, Lee
Virge was in the process of filling...
Bill, why not simplify:
Virge filled his pipe...?
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks Lee - both for reading and the suggestion. You are right about sometimes less is more. Bill
Comment from c_lucas
My childhood memories float about our neighbors brother who was mustard gassed in France during the first world war. IQ wise, he was the same age of us kids. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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My childhood memories float about our neighbors brother who was mustard gassed in France during the first world war. IQ wise, he was the same age of us kids. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks for reading Charlie. Bill
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You're welcome, Bill. Charlie.
Comment from mizzkris20
Your story is very interesting and relaxing. You took me along for the ride and i feel as if I was a part of your story.The relationship between Rabbit and Virge is very sweet
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Your story is very interesting and relaxing. You took me along for the ride and i feel as if I was a part of your story.The relationship between Rabbit and Virge is very sweet
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks for reading and your kind comments. Bill
Comment from Adri7enne
"but I wanted to LAY there for AWHILE." LIE there for A WHILE. - two words.
Ah, what a sweet, touching story. The relationship between Rabbit and Virge is a classic. You write of their rapport with such a loving narrative voice, it's obvious the story still touches you. I enjoyed the read, Bill. Good job.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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"but I wanted to LAY there for AWHILE." LIE there for A WHILE. - two words.
Ah, what a sweet, touching story. The relationship between Rabbit and Virge is a classic. You write of their rapport with such a loving narrative voice, it's obvious the story still touches you. I enjoyed the read, Bill. Good job.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks for reading Adri and for taking the time to help me! I appreciate both. Bill
Comment from adewpearl
why do you capitalize Church?
I love the marshmallow in a plate full of brownies visual of this little white boy in the middle of a black congregation :-)
I love how the blackened hot dogs are the memorable part of church along with the clapping choir, and not the sermon, same story, different audience LOL
I love the love between Rabbit and Virge - good comic relief in the closing, kept me from bawling right when it was getting really sentimental :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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why do you capitalize Church?
I love the marshmallow in a plate full of brownies visual of this little white boy in the middle of a black congregation :-)
I love how the blackened hot dogs are the memorable part of church along with the clapping choir, and not the sermon, same story, different audience LOL
I love the love between Rabbit and Virge - good comic relief in the closing, kept me from bawling right when it was getting really sentimental :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and being my muse! I would have put this off without your gentle push. Bill
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of taking the reader where the reader needs to go. The writer holds the readers attention by introducing the black character. The writer expresses unity from this point on. The transitioning between events is smooth. The story is well balanced as the writer does a good job of bringing this chapter to a close and setting up for the next chapter. Good work.
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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The writer does a good job of taking the reader where the reader needs to go. The writer holds the readers attention by introducing the black character. The writer expresses unity from this point on. The transitioning between events is smooth. The story is well balanced as the writer does a good job of bringing this chapter to a close and setting up for the next chapter. Good work.
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reading and your very kind feedback. I appreciate both. Bill
Comment from Gungalo
This was really good and brought home some memories for me. It seems like the Rabbit had found himself a new member of the family in Virge. ANd he better remember how to run real fast.
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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This was really good and brought home some memories for me. It seems like the Rabbit had found himself a new member of the family in Virge. ANd he better remember how to run real fast.
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thanks G. I'm always glad when you stop by. Always warm regards, Bill
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Smile.
