Rabbit
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Comment from Titanx9
Rabbit sure had some fun that summer, especially after his cousin Carol arrived on the scene. It's a good thing their stint at playing "if you let me see yours I'll let you see mines" ended when they were called downstairs. That little experiment just might have gotten out of hand. I love Virge and Rabbit's conversations, they are hilarious!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Rabbit sure had some fun that summer, especially after his cousin Carol arrived on the scene. It's a good thing their stint at playing "if you let me see yours I'll let you see mines" ended when they were called downstairs. That little experiment just might have gotten out of hand. I love Virge and Rabbit's conversations, they are hilarious!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thanks for reading and the kind feedback. Bill
Comment from Max Edon
I haven't read the previous chapters, but I enjoyed reading this. It was very sweet and interesting. I like the characters. They seem very real.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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I haven't read the previous chapters, but I enjoyed reading this. It was very sweet and interesting. I like the characters. They seem very real.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thanks Max, both for reading and your review. Bill
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You are welcome
Comment from Adri7enne
"My friend, Virge, claimed that most likely, what was removed was brains and good looks." LOL! I can see how Rabbit and Virge were good friends. He could get down to see things from the kid's perspective. LOL!
"I came to find out that they developed that picture and it's hanging on the wall at the Sheriff's office." LOL! It sounds like you had a pretty sheltered, gentile, southern childhood. Fun to read about it. Kids should gobble that up.
LOL! Damn the laws, uh, Bill! "Shoot, I guess I'll never get to see Carol naked." Darn!
So cute.
Well done, Bill. You keep it in line with Rabbit's perspective and you make me grin. Yes, he was precocious.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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"My friend, Virge, claimed that most likely, what was removed was brains and good looks." LOL! I can see how Rabbit and Virge were good friends. He could get down to see things from the kid's perspective. LOL!
"I came to find out that they developed that picture and it's hanging on the wall at the Sheriff's office." LOL! It sounds like you had a pretty sheltered, gentile, southern childhood. Fun to read about it. Kids should gobble that up.
LOL! Damn the laws, uh, Bill! "Shoot, I guess I'll never get to see Carol naked." Darn!
So cute.
Well done, Bill. You keep it in line with Rabbit's perspective and you make me grin. Yes, he was precocious.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thanks for reading Adri and for a review that made me smile! Bill
Comment from kentuckywoman53
I enjoyed reading this chapter. It was easy to visualize the characters not only through their conversation, but also their actions.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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I enjoyed reading this chapter. It was easy to visualize the characters not only through their conversation, but also their actions.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting! Have you posted your next chapter? Bill
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You are very welcome Bill. I have been doing some editing and plan to post the entire book at one time. I hope to do that within the next two days. I wish you continued success.
Comment from Sasha
I enjoyed this chapter immensely. It is well written, fun, delightful and even a bit spicy in parts. Poor Rabbit, he's probably right, he'll never get to see Carol naked. Thanks for the fun read and big laugh.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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I enjoyed this chapter immensely. It is well written, fun, delightful and even a bit spicy in parts. Poor Rabbit, he's probably right, he'll never get to see Carol naked. Thanks for the fun read and big laugh.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reading and your nice feedback! Bill
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Thank you for reading and your nice feedback! Bill
Comment from AprilShower
Good story bhogg. I enjoyed reading it. It seems that grandma knew that something might be going on upstairs with these two cousins of the opposite sex.
I think 'like' should be in past tense.
but I like(d) (or wanted) to save that dime for later.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Good story bhogg. I enjoyed reading it. It seems that grandma knew that something might be going on upstairs with these two cousins of the opposite sex.
I think 'like' should be in past tense.
but I like(d) (or wanted) to save that dime for later.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reading and your kind feedback. I'll look at your suggestion. Bill
Comment from c_lucas
We called that "playing doctor." Our house was four feet off the ground with brick pillar supports. I hadn't thought about those days for a very long time. Good job, Bill.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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We called that "playing doctor." Our house was four feet off the ground with brick pillar supports. I hadn't thought about those days for a very long time. Good job, Bill.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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And what were you doing underneath that house? Thanks for reading Charlie. Bill
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Studying anatomy. You're welcome, Bill. Charlie
Comment from N.K. Wagner
You'll have to forgive my laughter, Bill. It's accompanied by eye rolls and head shaking. Life is just so FULL of disappointments. Well written, as always. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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You'll have to forgive my laughter, Bill. It's accompanied by eye rolls and head shaking. Life is just so FULL of disappointments. Well written, as always. :) Nancy
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you Nancy! I still need to visit your blog site. Haven't done so yet. Warm regards, Bill
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That's what happens when you're on a roll - no time for frivolity. Just keep going, my friend. You're doing great. :) nancy
Comment from barkingdog
This sounds just like two nine-year olds. The dialogue between them is wonderful and not understanding certain words that he hears would be true.
I related to the chili dog and coke and riding an escalator and then trying on soldier's clothes at the Army store.
I love the paragraph about Wesley being real and as a cousin, being 'something removed'. LOL He figured it was brains and good looks. Perfect nine year old reasoning!
Then along comes Carol with brains and good looks in tact.
Boy oh boy what he almost learned from Carol.
He had quite a day.
I didn't see anything to add or correct.
Great chapter. I think anyone could read and understand it without reading previous chapters.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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This sounds just like two nine-year olds. The dialogue between them is wonderful and not understanding certain words that he hears would be true.
I related to the chili dog and coke and riding an escalator and then trying on soldier's clothes at the Army store.
I love the paragraph about Wesley being real and as a cousin, being 'something removed'. LOL He figured it was brains and good looks. Perfect nine year old reasoning!
Then along comes Carol with brains and good looks in tact.
Boy oh boy what he almost learned from Carol.
He had quite a day.
I didn't see anything to add or correct.
Great chapter. I think anyone could read and understand it without reading previous chapters.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reading and the kind and generous feedback. Writing a novel is not something I typically do, so am always worried that people won't understand without reading previous posts. Regards, Bill
Comment from adewpearl
love the reason you lost matinee privileges LOL
what a disappointment to take her all the way to marvel at the moving stairs only to hear he bigger city has plenty of escalators LOL
your uncle's not here - add the apostrophe
taking peeks at each other's private parts - there sure is a little game many of us can remember LOL
love Virge's discussion of laws and how they don't have to make sense :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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love the reason you lost matinee privileges LOL
what a disappointment to take her all the way to marvel at the moving stairs only to hear he bigger city has plenty of escalators LOL
your uncle's not here - add the apostrophe
taking peeks at each other's private parts - there sure is a little game many of us can remember LOL
love Virge's discussion of laws and how they don't have to make sense :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thanks for reading Brooke. I always appreciate your willingness to help! Bill
