Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Hi, Mermaids. A lovely thought for a nonet. Many lovely phrases. Crystal spirits and earth's sleeping soul are among them. Your syllable count and arrangement are working fine, but I counted 8 lines instead of 9! Does that make it an octet? Jewels shine is three syllables, so you skip a two-syllable line and jump to your last, the one-syllable, bright. Maybe you could make it jewels shine/crystal/bright. Rating a five, because it's something you can easily fix. judi

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013

Yes, this poem needs work. Thanks for your positive suggestions and thoughful review. Elaine

Comment from Joannforsberg

Excellent

nonet is a interesting type of poetry. I will attempt this some time as to descend in syllables would seem to be difficult. As to make a poem make sense and descend in words sounds like some work. Blessings for a great job, Jo

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013

Thanks for a great review. Elaine

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Hi there! This is a very lovely nonet about snowflakes. I can relate very well as we are surrounded by snow. One thing I noticed is you went from three syllables to one syllable. I think you missed the line with two syllables.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013

Yes, I revised the poem to fit the form. I left out one line by accident. Elaine

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Well it's a great way to think o them to Mermaids. Each on being different and having it's place in this world. Sigh, oh yeah.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013

Thanks for taking time to read and enjoy. Elaine

reply by Gungalo on 08-Jan-2013

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Comment from McMurry903

Excellent

This is such a beautiful nonet poem. Wonderful imagery conveys such a gentle feeling as you make the snow fall sound so lovely. I enjoyed very much! Brian

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013

Thanks for a great review. Elaine

Comment from KR Linton

Excellent

Your word choices were superbly delicate. I like how you conjured the images of snowflakes without ever using the word "snow." Calling them life forms gave them life, and the structure of the poem fit the subject matter.

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 Comment Written 04-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013

Thanks for a great review. Elaine