Alone
Contest entry for Lonely Poem-freestyle29 total reviews
Comment from prayingpoet
Your words captured the feeling of loss and loneliness. You followed the rules, had great flow and good content. Having lost my mother many years ago, yes this is what it feels like.
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Your words captured the feeling of loss and loneliness. You followed the rules, had great flow and good content. Having lost my mother many years ago, yes this is what it feels like.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you Janice for your kind review. I am sorry for the loss of your mother. I loss my dad 11 yrs. ago and this piece was written with her in mind.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
thisi s very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about reaching out for someone who's no longer there, excellent imagery, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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thisi s very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about reaching out for someone who's no longer there, excellent imagery, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you sweetwoodjax for reviewing my poem and the well wishes for the contest. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from MAMONIA
Thanks for this heartwarming and lovely sad and
lonely poem. It broke my heart, for starters.
You put this in such a lovely form, it took my
breath away.
What a fabulous entry for the contest.
All my best and good luck.
Marie
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thanks for this heartwarming and lovely sad and
lonely poem. It broke my heart, for starters.
You put this in such a lovely form, it took my
breath away.
What a fabulous entry for the contest.
All my best and good luck.
Marie
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Marie, thank you so much for your encouragement and review of my poem. The six stars was the icing on the cake. :o)
Comment from Justin Chopin
Very emotional and very profoundy. The imagery of cold empty sheets really set up the very innovative and confessional style of your piece. Fantastic. Reminds me of the old Simon and Garfunkel song "The Sounds of Silence" because of your mentioning that this silence was as deafening as the roar of an electric guitar or an ear bleeding scream. Great job with the poetry.
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Very emotional and very profoundy. The imagery of cold empty sheets really set up the very innovative and confessional style of your piece. Fantastic. Reminds me of the old Simon and Garfunkel song "The Sounds of Silence" because of your mentioning that this silence was as deafening as the roar of an electric guitar or an ear bleeding scream. Great job with the poetry.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you Justin for the review of my poem and for the encouragement of the six stars. I have always loved Simon and Garfunkel and especially that song. I had forgotten about it until now. Thank you for the reminder.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Rondeno
I hope this is a work of imagination, not experience. I must say, it seems very real. You have captured that aspect of bereavement which hurts most of all - out of habit, expecting the other person to appear or do something, only to realize it's never going to happen. Well done.
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I hope this is a work of imagination, not experience. I must say, it seems very real. You have captured that aspect of bereavement which hurts most of all - out of habit, expecting the other person to appear or do something, only to realize it's never going to happen. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you Rondeno for your kind review. No, I have not personally lost my spouse. I lost my brother to cancer and I was writing from the perspective of his wife and from my mothers when she lost my dad.
Comment from el twelve
nicely written, it was sad and yet not. I guess all of us will go through that at one time in our lives. Thank you for sharing, good luck in the contest
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nicely written, it was sad and yet not. I guess all of us will go through that at one time in our lives. Thank you for sharing, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you el twelve for reviewing my work. Thanks for the good luck wishes,too.
Comment from Papabearua
The loss of a loved one produces the worst kind of loneliness, one that cannot be filled by anyone. Your poem speaks well of this loss and how hard it can be.
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The loss of a loved one produces the worst kind of loneliness, one that cannot be filled by anyone. Your poem speaks well of this loss and how hard it can be.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Papabearua, I appreciate your review of my poem. Yes, loneliness can show its face many ways but to me the worst kind is the loss of a loved one (spouse).
Comment from LucidDreem
That must be an unbearable feeling. I've felt like this at times, but not because of a deceased spouse. Conveys the emotion of loneliness really well. Very sad. Good job
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That must be an unbearable feeling. I've felt like this at times, but not because of a deceased spouse. Conveys the emotion of loneliness really well. Very sad. Good job
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much LucidDreem for your kind review. I appreciate you reading my work.
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
I just read another one for this entry, and both of you have really taken an original and creative approach to the subject. Great imagery here of the weather that correlates to the sadness of a loved one passing. So far, you have my vote. Holly
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I just read another one for this entry, and both of you have really taken an original and creative approach to the subject. Great imagery here of the weather that correlates to the sadness of a loved one passing. So far, you have my vote. Holly
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you Holly for your kind words and stars. It would be nice to win one (a contest) :o)
