All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Pull Up a Blue Chair"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from ajdevore
no fiercesome viper, no Pied Piper needed FANTASTIC line!!
Slowing down to think. Aye, there's the rub. Thank and act and hold civil discourse We all have a vote and should use it wisely.
I really loved this
Thank you
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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no fiercesome viper, no Pied Piper needed FANTASTIC line!!
Slowing down to think. Aye, there's the rub. Thank and act and hold civil discourse We all have a vote and should use it wisely.
I really loved this
Thank you
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thank you so much for reading, considering and reviewing my dear! :) Sharyn
Comment from Nate Gage
Great poem...the flow and format go very well together...also some ver deep thoughts here! It seems to me that we (unfortunately) let so much of this glance over our heads because we live in a culture of entitlements. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Great poem...the flow and format go very well together...also some ver deep thoughts here! It seems to me that we (unfortunately) let so much of this glance over our heads because we live in a culture of entitlements. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Nate!
Comment from adewpearl
your internal rhyming gives this the feel of slam poetry - I like the pacing and the strong beat
excellent political/social commentary with a bite
good alliteration in gravity and greed
I love the line about little brains
more excellent alliteration in your final stanza along with effective imagery :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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your internal rhyming gives this the feel of slam poetry - I like the pacing and the strong beat
excellent political/social commentary with a bite
good alliteration in gravity and greed
I love the line about little brains
more excellent alliteration in your final stanza along with effective imagery :-) Brooke
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Brooke!
Comment from sgalletti
I absolutely LOVE this poem! It reminds me of my own passionate tirades while watchng or reading anything to do with President Obama. He blames everything and everyone for what HE has created through false promises, lies and lack of leadership. I PRAY there is a change. Thanks for this rant. Sue
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I absolutely LOVE this poem! It reminds me of my own passionate tirades while watchng or reading anything to do with President Obama. He blames everything and everyone for what HE has created through false promises, lies and lack of leadership. I PRAY there is a change. Thanks for this rant. Sue
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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always good to have a good rant compantion Sue!
Comment from MikoAmaya
Nice, very nice. I've never read Slam poetry before, but even without that experience, this poem has a fast feel to it in the beginning, but, as you said, seem to slow down as you reached the end. Great job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Nice, very nice. I've never read Slam poetry before, but even without that experience, this poem has a fast feel to it in the beginning, but, as you said, seem to slow down as you reached the end. Great job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thank you Mike - a new kind of write for me, but who can resist after being subjected to the barrage of media nonsense that's fed to us daily?
Comment from rashi kumar
Wonderful it is!
So full of life, rage, irony and simmering questions!
A very well-thought of poem,
so well-penned!
The election time is here again.
Yes, the Obama is loved and hated both.
Lets see!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Wonderful it is!
So full of life, rage, irony and simmering questions!
A very well-thought of poem,
so well-penned!
The election time is here again.
Yes, the Obama is loved and hated both.
Lets see!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thank you SOOO much kashi! and a special thank you for your magic '6' - I'm honored! :) Sharyn
Comment from Oldsteamer
It's nice to hear you slam mam you are generally so ebullient.
Got me riled up. Would love to have tea sitting in your blue chairs.
Unfortunately we've let this go on for way too long.
I say off with thier heads.i don't think it's going to get better soon,
.you can sit in my foxhole any day.
Regards.
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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It's nice to hear you slam mam you are generally so ebullient.
Got me riled up. Would love to have tea sitting in your blue chairs.
Unfortunately we've let this go on for way too long.
I say off with thier heads.i don't think it's going to get better soon,
.you can sit in my foxhole any day.
Regards.
- R -
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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just keep that foxhole well supplied my dear - may need it! :)S
Comment from RikkaLyn
This is a robust and arresting piece that I would love to see preformed. I love the sections that had only one word to a line, it was a perfect way to execute a strong point.
This section:
but that swimming sleaze crawls, leaking
cracking through my dyke
prising it apart, barb by barb
until I can harbor
nothing
was my favorite stanza by far...good word choices, very aggressive.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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This is a robust and arresting piece that I would love to see preformed. I love the sections that had only one word to a line, it was a perfect way to execute a strong point.
This section:
but that swimming sleaze crawls, leaking
cracking through my dyke
prising it apart, barb by barb
until I can harbor
nothing
was my favorite stanza by far...good word choices, very aggressive.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thank you so much Rikka - this was a satisfying write for me, so glad you "got" it too (and those are my favorite lines too, by the way). :) Sharyn
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A GOOD AND A WELL DISPLAYED POEM.Ah the election they are all to keen to say what they can offer but never do. A lovely poem that presents the subject the presentation is beautiful. Mary
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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A GOOD AND A WELL DISPLAYED POEM.Ah the election they are all to keen to say what they can offer but never do. A lovely poem that presents the subject the presentation is beautiful. Mary
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Mary Ann!
Comment from c_lucas
Each of us has had a part of building today's world. Some by making the wrong choice and others by making no choice at all. I a few week we have another chance to set our world right. Well written.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Each of us has had a part of building today's world. Some by making the wrong choice and others by making no choice at all. I a few week we have another chance to set our world right. Well written.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I doubt it will be set right by the happenings in a few weeks unfortunately Charlie! :(