Mike Radshaw and the Black Dawn
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Comment from Sasha
I loved every word of this one. You have a marvelous way with words. You take the reader on a wild ride from uproarious laughter to spine chilling terror in less than a snap of two fingers. I nearly fell off my chair reading:
I'd have laughed and swept it under the carpet. But all my rugs had been pulled out from under me.
I anxiously await the next chapter.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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I loved every word of this one. You have a marvelous way with words. You take the reader on a wild ride from uproarious laughter to spine chilling terror in less than a snap of two fingers. I nearly fell off my chair reading:
I'd have laughed and swept it under the carpet. But all my rugs had been pulled out from under me.
I anxiously await the next chapter.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thanks so much, my dear friend! I was really worried about this chapter, whether it was too slow or too wordy or out of touch with the previous one. It took me several days to finish because I had real trouble getting on with it.
Thank you for restoring my confidence :-).
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are an excelllent story teller. I sat on the edge of my seat as I read, wanting to make sure I didn't miss a word. This is very good.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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You are an excelllent story teller. I sat on the edge of my seat as I read, wanting to make sure I didn't miss a word. This is very good.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thanks so much, Barbara! I've been fiddling with this chapter for so long I couldn't tell if it was any good at all! I'm thrilled you enjoyed it :-).
Mike
Comment from ScarletClearwater
it hardened my thoughts like quick-dry cement - Great line. I liked the smart way this was written. Great work you have here. Can't wait to read more.
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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it hardened my thoughts like quick-dry cement - Great line. I liked the smart way this was written. Great work you have here. Can't wait to read more.
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Scarlet :-). Mike Radshaw even thinks in sarcasm, so he's a character I enjoy writing (I break out all the metahpors and similes I can think of). So glad you enjoyed it!
Mike
Comment from adewpearl
my head spinning like a potter's wheel - love your similes
a barbed wire enema - now, that one packs a punch
Intense expression of his emotions
longer than Dirk Diggler on a warm day - now, Mike, remember, ladies are reading LOL
Your dialogue sounds natural, conveys the characters' emotions effectively and is interspersed well with telling descriptions of non-verbal communication.
I love Mike Radshaw, even if you do allow months and months between chapters. LOL Brooke :-)
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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my head spinning like a potter's wheel - love your similes
a barbed wire enema - now, that one packs a punch
Intense expression of his emotions
longer than Dirk Diggler on a warm day - now, Mike, remember, ladies are reading LOL
Your dialogue sounds natural, conveys the characters' emotions effectively and is interspersed well with telling descriptions of non-verbal communication.
I love Mike Radshaw, even if you do allow months and months between chapters. LOL Brooke :-)
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Brooke :-). He's definitely one of my favourite characters. I couldn't believe it when I saw the date I'd posted the last chapter! Definitely time to conclude this tale.
Mike