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Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Awesome! Love this. It had a Twilight Zone moral kind of feel to it. Great job on developing the characters, story line and dialogue. Nice work!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Awesome! Love this. It had a Twilight Zone moral kind of feel to it. Great job on developing the characters, story line and dialogue. Nice work!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Patty, Thank you for your enthusiastic and encouraging review.
Comment from ennahanid
My last 6 is yours for this incredible tale. Your characters were outstanding. I don't have a clue about punctuation/grammar stuff. I have a clue about how I felt after reading it...in awe. Descriptive and imaginative and kept me totally entertained and I thank you for it...Dinah
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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My last 6 is yours for this incredible tale. Your characters were outstanding. I don't have a clue about punctuation/grammar stuff. I have a clue about how I felt after reading it...in awe. Descriptive and imaginative and kept me totally entertained and I thank you for it...Dinah
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Dinah, I am so pleased that you liked it. Thank you so much for the super-stellar review.
Comment from Silverlock
Well Kudos to you for this amusing and imaginative tale. You fullfilled the brief perfectly, and I liked the way you brought the characters together in the fantasy environment you created. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Well Kudos to you for this amusing and imaginative tale. You fullfilled the brief perfectly, and I liked the way you brought the characters together in the fantasy environment you created. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Stalking Wolf
The tale behind the tale seems that everybody gets what they really deserve. The good part was the kid walking again. The bad part was the confused teenager didn't get time to learn any sense. Good read. Should do well.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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The tale behind the tale seems that everybody gets what they really deserve. The good part was the kid walking again. The bad part was the confused teenager didn't get time to learn any sense. Good read. Should do well.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you very much for your kind and meaningful review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is a masterpiece. Best short story I have read on FS yet. A sure winner in the contest.
A few typos:
elevators starting floor.<< missing the apostrophe
The first occurrence of the word 'descent' is missing S.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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This is a masterpiece. Best short story I have read on FS yet. A sure winner in the contest.
A few typos:
elevators starting floor.<< missing the apostrophe
The first occurrence of the word 'descent' is missing S.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you very much for your kind and helpful review.
Comment from lnoreika
Love it! The people who care the least about life, or take it for granted die. The others are transported into the lives they wished to have but fate chose differently for them.
The elevator goes down as opposed to up representing the death of their current life situations.
Your story reminds me of a cross between Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, and The Poseidon Adventure.
Your writing is top notch. I hope you win!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Love it! The people who care the least about life, or take it for granted die. The others are transported into the lives they wished to have but fate chose differently for them.
The elevator goes down as opposed to up representing the death of their current life situations.
Your story reminds me of a cross between Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, and The Poseidon Adventure.
Your writing is top notch. I hope you win!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you so very much for your kind,meaningful, and generous review.