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Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Really love this one! Love the last 2 lines especially. So true!! Love the way you combined two forms for this one as well. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012
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Really love this one! Love the last 2 lines especially. So true!! Love the way you combined two forms for this one as well. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012
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thank you patty :)
Comment from mystery poet
Only the daisy can qualify for this superb write.
I know the daisy has to be royal flower, even above
the rose. For they grow wild and have to be sanctified
by Mother Nature herself.
Daisy petals dance
and ask questions to the wind ~
What a beautiful line...
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Only the daisy can qualify for this superb write.
I know the daisy has to be royal flower, even above
the rose. For they grow wild and have to be sanctified
by Mother Nature herself.
Daisy petals dance
and ask questions to the wind ~
What a beautiful line...
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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thank you mystery :-)
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You're very welcome.
LOL!!!
Comment from Starlit Ink
The black and white emphasized the simplicity of the poem. The poem is delicate and light just like a daisy and the questions it represents. Is this love or not, should we really have to ask that anyway? Your write asks and answers the question.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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The black and white emphasized the simplicity of the poem. The poem is delicate and light just like a daisy and the questions it represents. Is this love or not, should we really have to ask that anyway? Your write asks and answers the question.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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thank you starlit :-)
Comment from dmt1967
I like this poem it is very nicely written and composed I like the structured sentences and the way it flows off the tongue well done and thank you
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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I like this poem it is very nicely written and composed I like the structured sentences and the way it flows off the tongue well done and thank you
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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thank you dmt :)
Comment from ScarletClearwater
This piece really deserves a six star rating but I am all out :( So I give you the next best thing. Such a lovely acrostic and so true to the daisy. He loves me he loves me not thought was adorable and really painted this picture well. The answer is in the wind, so quiet. Great job!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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This piece really deserves a six star rating but I am all out :( So I give you the next best thing. Such a lovely acrostic and so true to the daisy. He loves me he loves me not thought was adorable and really painted this picture well. The answer is in the wind, so quiet. Great job!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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lol thank you scarlet :)
Comment from Taurean Monkey
A great tanka poem you've written here, which, as you say is also an acrostic. Couldn't have been easy to write. The syllables are perfect, as is the image. He loves me, he loves me not. Yep, I remember playing that game as a child. I don't think the daisy had as much fun, though. Your poem is pretty , especially lines two, four and five. Lovely, regards TM
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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A great tanka poem you've written here, which, as you say is also an acrostic. Couldn't have been easy to write. The syllables are perfect, as is the image. He loves me, he loves me not. Yep, I remember playing that game as a child. I don't think the daisy had as much fun, though. Your poem is pretty , especially lines two, four and five. Lovely, regards TM
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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LOL! thank you tm! :)
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You're welcome, Shelley :-)
Comment from FireFreckles
I absolutely loved this. It spoke to me - simple and clear, well-structured, and true. We find answers in the silence. We use traditions and superstitions to guide us (daisy petals in this case, to help us determine our own opinions.
Here, the wind, the breeze, speaks to us, whispers the answer. It is still unknown at the end. Your poem points to the power of the process.
Very creative, deep, simple, loved all of it.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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I absolutely loved this. It spoke to me - simple and clear, well-structured, and true. We find answers in the silence. We use traditions and superstitions to guide us (daisy petals in this case, to help us determine our own opinions.
Here, the wind, the breeze, speaks to us, whispers the answer. It is still unknown at the end. Your poem points to the power of the process.
Very creative, deep, simple, loved all of it.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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thank you fire :)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your delightful, well-written tanka effectively expresses the nature of soul-searching questions through personification. It makes me think of the old hit song "Blowin' in the Wind" ("The answer is blowin' in the wind") Peter, Paul, and Mary? Very good
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Your delightful, well-written tanka effectively expresses the nature of soul-searching questions through personification. It makes me think of the old hit song "Blowin' in the Wind" ("The answer is blowin' in the wind") Peter, Paul, and Mary? Very good
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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i've heard of that song lol - thanx janice! :)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, shelley, you did a great job writing this tanka poem about the question that daisies get asked, i enjoyed reading it ,very creative. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, shelley, you did a great job writing this tanka poem about the question that daisies get asked, i enjoyed reading it ,very creative. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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thank you jax :)
Comment from gifted$1
I like this new take on the 'does he/she love me or not.' Instead of plucking the petals out one by one, let the wind make the decision. This has beautiful imagery associated with it. You hit the syllable count right on with this one. Nice work.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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I like this new take on the 'does he/she love me or not.' Instead of plucking the petals out one by one, let the wind make the decision. This has beautiful imagery associated with it. You hit the syllable count right on with this one. Nice work.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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thank you gifted :)
