The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 " Dad's Secret"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from missy98writer
Sasha,
Chapter thirty-eight is chilling and smartly written. Woe, grandmother seen Dark bury a victim under flowers in the garden. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. You have used the following:
Narrative: great
Characerization: excellent
Word structure: excellent
Dialogue: very good
I'm going to recommend this chapter to other reviewers as a 'must' read. You are doing a flawless job writing this chapter. Keep on writing top notch, my friend. Please have a delightful day.
Melissa.
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Sasha,
Chapter thirty-eight is chilling and smartly written. Woe, grandmother seen Dark bury a victim under flowers in the garden. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. You have used the following:
Narrative: great
Characerization: excellent
Word structure: excellent
Dialogue: very good
I'm going to recommend this chapter to other reviewers as a 'must' read. You are doing a flawless job writing this chapter. Keep on writing top notch, my friend. Please have a delightful day.
Melissa.
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Oops! It wasn't ready to post. But I am glad you liked it.
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I loved it.
Melissa.