The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "More Questions "A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from adewpearl
think I'll go out and kill someone." - put the quotation mark after the period
His mother died when Dad was still very young, and - add comma
I know nothing about my Aunt - aunt
Of course I was curious, but - add comma
desperate need of a hearing aide - aid
find any information about your Aunt - aunt - only capitalize if part of a name, like Aunt Jane
Damn it, Mac - add comma for direct address
Got any brilliant ideas, my little genius - add comma
As always, pitch-perfect dialogue
Brooke
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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think I'll go out and kill someone." - put the quotation mark after the period
His mother died when Dad was still very young, and - add comma
I know nothing about my Aunt - aunt
Of course I was curious, but - add comma
desperate need of a hearing aide - aid
find any information about your Aunt - aunt - only capitalize if part of a name, like Aunt Jane
Damn it, Mac - add comma for direct address
Got any brilliant ideas, my little genius - add comma
As always, pitch-perfect dialogue
Brooke
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2012
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Thank for catching all the spags. I am thrilled you liked the dialogue in this one.