'Trail of Tears'
Now he says the land is not yours Speckled Snake26 total reviews
Comment from Patti R.
Technically I found your poem to be in beautiful form.
Having read your author notes, I realize how difficult a challenge you are taking on. Good luck with the rest of the speeches.
I am Canadian, living close to the U.S. border in southern Alberta. I live in what was was the land of the Blackfeet Indian, they spanned a territory on both sides of the medicine line (49th parallel). I carry such sadness over the history of the whites, Cdn and American, and their ruthless domination.
If you're interested, an author by the name of James Welch has written several amazing books on the history of the western North American Natives. He writes in novel form, his books are very educational and give insight into daily life of our first peoples.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Technically I found your poem to be in beautiful form.
Having read your author notes, I realize how difficult a challenge you are taking on. Good luck with the rest of the speeches.
I am Canadian, living close to the U.S. border in southern Alberta. I live in what was was the land of the Blackfeet Indian, they spanned a territory on both sides of the medicine line (49th parallel). I carry such sadness over the history of the whites, Cdn and American, and their ruthless domination.
If you're interested, an author by the name of James Welch has written several amazing books on the history of the western North American Natives. He writes in novel form, his books are very educational and give insight into daily life of our first peoples.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Patti R. Thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. Thank you for the tip. I will most certainly read this book. again thank you... jlsavell
Comment from Lobengula
This was magnificent. Read from a mountain top, it would resound in all ears and many heads would bow in shame. The rhyming is skilled and the whole poem, I feel, is written in blood and tears. A heart screaming out for remembrance and could have been written only by the most able of poets
"Well done" is a fruitless accolade, but in turn I beg you to understand my feeling.
Love Mike.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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This was magnificent. Read from a mountain top, it would resound in all ears and many heads would bow in shame. The rhyming is skilled and the whole poem, I feel, is written in blood and tears. A heart screaming out for remembrance and could have been written only by the most able of poets
"Well done" is a fruitless accolade, but in turn I beg you to understand my feeling.
Love Mike.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Mike, my dearest friend. Thank you so very much. I want you to know I am not ignoring you. I have read your last three post and hope to get to the reives today. I know you do not care, but I do. Thank you my friend, your words always, always, humble me.. jimi
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I only wish I could have given you a 'six,' but alas I'd come to the end of the line with them. But it was a beautifully written piece. Love, Mike
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I only wish I could have given you a 'six,' but alas I'd come to the end of the line with them. But it was a beautifully written piece. Love, Mike
Comment from Anisa-
This is really good. I think you did an excellent job at telling a story in your poem. It was powerful, meaningful and carried a great message. I love that it's historical and that you've included the notes to follow up with. Good job, thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
I didn't notice any spag errors or any areas where the flow was choppy or anything like that.
Anisa
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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This is really good. I think you did an excellent job at telling a story in your poem. It was powerful, meaningful and carried a great message. I love that it's historical and that you've included the notes to follow up with. Good job, thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
I didn't notice any spag errors or any areas where the flow was choppy or anything like that.
Anisa
Comment Written 29-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Anisai1, thank you very much for stopping by to read and review this poem. I appreciate you very much.. jlsavell
Comment from cce29
awesome photo selection for your poem. I like that you have rhyme, but not too much of it. A lot of people put too much rhyme into a poem that tells a story. Then it seems more like a basic poem, and not a story. Your poem flows well. I like that there is also dialog in your poem. well done.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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awesome photo selection for your poem. I like that you have rhyme, but not too much of it. A lot of people put too much rhyme into a poem that tells a story. Then it seems more like a basic poem, and not a story. Your poem flows well. I like that there is also dialog in your poem. well done.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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cce29, thank you very much for stopping by to read and review my work. Your comments boost my confidence. Again thank you so much... jlsavell
Comment from Modee
Very well written, and your author's notes tell quite a tale. It is terrible that it has taken so many years to reveal the injustice done in those years...and still to this day.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Very well written, and your author's notes tell quite a tale. It is terrible that it has taken so many years to reveal the injustice done in those years...and still to this day.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Modee, thank you ever so much fro stopping by to read and review my work. I hope to do a series of these. again thank you ever so much... jlsavell
Comment from HuntersMoon
Hi J :)
A wonderfully told tale of great sadness in the land - and of how our history is a trail of broken promises.
Well constructed, well told, and simply beautiful. You make this look too easy, my friend :) You remind me of a favorite quote:
"A true poet does not bother to be poetical. Nor does a nursery gardener scent his roses." ~ Jean Cocteau
Well done and best of luck -
Ken
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reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Hi J :)
A wonderfully told tale of great sadness in the land - and of how our history is a trail of broken promises.
Well constructed, well told, and simply beautiful. You make this look too easy, my friend :) You remind me of a favorite quote:
"A true poet does not bother to be poetical. Nor does a nursery gardener scent his roses." ~ Jean Cocteau
Well done and best of luck -
Ken
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Hello, sweet friend, how are you? What a pleasant and welcomed surprise! Your review and compliments humble me. thank you ever so much.. jlsavell
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I won't point out that we're in competition (LOL). You'd get my vote but it's not that kind of competition. Ken
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oops.. well you needn't worry. Have I read yours? Let me go to your portfolio..
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Orion's Keep - I think you did :)
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yes ,I remember now.. well now I should just mosey on off the board and take my wee poem with me.. thanks for reminding me!!!! lol..
