Comment from Janie King

Excellent

meCharlie....myselfn.....typo's...again this is a very stressed filled situation..the emotions everyone must be dealing with would have to be tremendous...good job. god bless.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012

Thanks for catching the spags.

Comment from Veronica Grace

Excellent

Another great chapter and looking forward to more.

These small things jumped at me:

As expected, he assured (meCharlie) was probably

I'd like a few minutes in a room with Billy (myselfn) but

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 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012

Thanks for catching the spags.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

typo- he assured E Charlie was
impulse control, and - add comma
every passing minute, and I knew - add comma
Her arm is pretty messed up, but under - add comma
minutes in a room with Billy myself, but - add comma
He's been through hell, and - add comma
I laughed out loud at the suggestion James would talk Billy to death LOL
Relax, my friend - add comma for direct address
The door abruptly open - opened
opened, and Charlie -add comma
Mac stood up, and looking at Charlie, said - add both commas
Surprised to see Detectives Mac and Acres, she - add comma
chilling closing
Brooke

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 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012

The talking to death remark is something I have been told on far too many occasions....thanks for catching the all too many missed commas.