The Heir Apparent
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Comment from c_lucas
It is usually the meek and smiled mannered person who is the blood thirsty killer. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good job
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what she be;oeved (believed)
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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It is usually the meek and smiled mannered person who is the blood thirsty killer. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good job
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what she be;oeved (believed)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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Yes, it's always the last person you think of.
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You're welcome, Sasha. Charlie
Comment from Veronica Grace
With every chapter I read the more i want to continue reading yur story. It is most intriguing and well written.
Susan did not bother to hide her anger over what she (be;oeved) was my betrayal of Dad
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With every chapter I read the more i want to continue reading yur story. It is most intriguing and well written.
Susan did not bother to hide her anger over what she (be;oeved) was my betrayal of Dad
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
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Thanks for catching the spag. I am so pleased you are enjoying this.
Comment from Janie King
I'd say there's more than enough evidence to confict this dude right from the start..it's a wonder he hadn't killed his daughter..oh dear..this is intense but not to the point I cna't handle it. God bless.
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I'd say there's more than enough evidence to confict this dude right from the start..it's a wonder he hadn't killed his daughter..oh dear..this is intense but not to the point I cna't handle it. God bless.
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
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Your question is one many have have asked. I am pleased you like this story.
Comment from adewpearl
typo - what she be;oeved
she stomped passed me - past
I like Mr. Hurley's advice to the family members
I can tell you about most of the evidence, but - add comma
typo - two victims in the photographs - you mistyped photographs
Hairs, fibers and DNA, were found - drop the comma after DNA
This chapter lays out the case clearly and compellingly Brooke
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typo - what she be;oeved
she stomped passed me - past
I like Mr. Hurley's advice to the family members
I can tell you about most of the evidence, but - add comma
typo - two victims in the photographs - you mistyped photographs
Hairs, fibers and DNA, were found - drop the comma after DNA
This chapter lays out the case clearly and compellingly Brooke
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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Thanks for catching the spage...all of them. I forgot to have James go over this one.
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well, the boy does have his mind on other things...