The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "James Pauses To Take a Breath"A family learns their father is a serial killer
39 total reviews
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
This chapter may be shot, but it brings grim realism to the characterization of James. Real people, no matter how intelligent, will reach an emotional breaking point if their support system falls apart. Now James has lost the support of both his mother and father to a seemingly endless cascade of evil revelations.
It was time for his dark surprises to become grief. His whole family history has shifted in a few intense weeks. Now the cleanest of young men feels covered with, "A slimy, wet blanket of nauseating disgust....a horrific nightmare too heavy to remove.'
Suddenly, I feel privy to Mathew's family secrets too awful to to know or talk about. For James such a feeling would be like despair unto death, as Danish religious philosopher
S¸ren Kierkegaard described deep mental depression. Kierkegaard taught that only by experiencing the death process, could someone begin to heal from such deep mental despair. This is what you captured in this shor chapter.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
  |
Hi Valerie:)
This chapter may be shot, but it brings grim realism to the characterization of James. Real people, no matter how intelligent, will reach an emotional breaking point if their support system falls apart. Now James has lost the support of both his mother and father to a seemingly endless cascade of evil revelations.
It was time for his dark surprises to become grief. His whole family history has shifted in a few intense weeks. Now the cleanest of young men feels covered with, "A slimy, wet blanket of nauseating disgust....a horrific nightmare too heavy to remove.'
Suddenly, I feel privy to Mathew's family secrets too awful to to know or talk about. For James such a feeling would be like despair unto death, as Danish religious philosopher
S¸ren Kierkegaard described deep mental depression. Kierkegaard taught that only by experiencing the death process, could someone begin to heal from such deep mental despair. This is what you captured in this shor chapter.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
-
Thank you so very much. James is finally beginning to grieve, hopefully now he can begin to heal.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Smurf, you have written to my way of thinking the best chapter of this book with this gem. Absolutely every emotion is there all choking sobs every running nose hot water turning to cold. Incredible you have written well with this one. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
|
Hi Smurf, you have written to my way of thinking the best chapter of this book with this gem. Absolutely every emotion is there all choking sobs every running nose hot water turning to cold. Incredible you have written well with this one. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
-
Thank you so very much.
Comment from Alaskastory
'James Pauses To Take a Breath' takes a long look at James in the way he exposes his grief. Your description is amazingly good at telling exactly how he feels. I'm beginning to wonder about his sister who was hospitalized. Are you going to bring us up to date on her?
Super good chapter, Sasha. lol, Marie
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
|
'James Pauses To Take a Breath' takes a long look at James in the way he exposes his grief. Your description is amazingly good at telling exactly how he feels. I'm beginning to wonder about his sister who was hospitalized. Are you going to bring us up to date on her?
Super good chapter, Sasha. lol, Marie
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
-
Most definitely, I plan to focus on her next.
Comment from Tellis
Well at least he's grieving now. He needs to do that to be able to cope with this a little otherwise he'll freak out or something. Great short chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
|
Well at least he's grieving now. He needs to do that to be able to cope with this a little otherwise he'll freak out or something. Great short chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
-
Yes, he has been so busy holding everyone else together and looking for answers that he has not taken time to grieve. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from WRITER1
This is such a burden for the kid. I feel so sorry for him, it is like he is being pulled down into a vortex and can't escape
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
|
This is such a burden for the kid. I feel so sorry for him, it is like he is being pulled down into a vortex and can't escape
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
-
That is a perfect description of what James is experiencing. Thanks for the great review despite being an awesomely short chapter.
Comment from animatqua
Very nice catch up here, and warranted. Readers following the story have this information, of course. Readers just coming in need it. And, as you say, its time for a breather.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
|
Very nice catch up here, and warranted. Readers following the story have this information, of course. Readers just coming in need it. And, as you say, its time for a breather.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
-
After the last chapter I thought it was a good time to slow down the pace a bit. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Powerful.
Good descriptions.
You capture his emotions so well.
Interesting.
What a difficult place to be in.
It's hard to understand how people can do such horrible things to other people.
Good way to end the chapter as well.
Katie
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
|
Powerful.
Good descriptions.
You capture his emotions so well.
Interesting.
What a difficult place to be in.
It's hard to understand how people can do such horrible things to other people.
Good way to end the chapter as well.
Katie
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
-
Thanks. I am pleased you liked this chapter. Despite its short length, it was a difficult one to write.
-
You're welcome. It was good.
Katie
Comment from RebelRose
Poor James. All that he has learned and had to process has aged him before his time. That is a heavy burden for a boy of eighteen to carry. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
|
Poor James. All that he has learned and had to process has aged him before his time. That is a heavy burden for a boy of eighteen to carry. Great chapter.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
-
It is a heavy burden for anyone to carry. I am so pleased you continue to enjoy this story.
Comment from Gungalo
Wow, this really gives the reader the feelings he was going through. So dirty that no amount of soap and water could wash him clean. Now that is descriptive to the max!!! Great turning point chapter here that eases the reader into the next one. Love your story!!!!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
|
Wow, this really gives the reader the feelings he was going through. So dirty that no amount of soap and water could wash him clean. Now that is descriptive to the max!!! Great turning point chapter here that eases the reader into the next one. Love your story!!!!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
-
I thought we all needed a moment to catch out breath. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is another great chapter for your book, smurphgirl, james is letting go of his emotions and afterward he
should be able to think more clearly, after holding everything in for years.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
|
this is another great chapter for your book, smurphgirl, james is letting go of his emotions and afterward he
should be able to think more clearly, after holding everything in for years.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
-
Yes, a good cry can do wonders. Glad you enjoyed this oh, so very short chapter.