The Heir Apparent
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:}
This is an interesting chapter in the mental aftermath of what James has learned about his father's sister/mother. The biggest mystery now become the absence of this woman's personal history.
Incest always carries an evil connotation and can create dysfunctions that last for generations. James seems to realize that he has pushed his mother to the edge of sanity and now sets out to trace his family tree. Is he going to fine the start of his family's history.
I think it is time to go through the crack in the mirror to reveal what is hidden there. Can James do this and keep his own sanity. I want to find out soon!
Great emotional writing.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Hi Valerie:}
This is an interesting chapter in the mental aftermath of what James has learned about his father's sister/mother. The biggest mystery now become the absence of this woman's personal history.
Incest always carries an evil connotation and can create dysfunctions that last for generations. James seems to realize that he has pushed his mother to the edge of sanity and now sets out to trace his family tree. Is he going to fine the start of his family's history.
I think it is time to go through the crack in the mirror to reveal what is hidden there. Can James do this and keep his own sanity. I want to find out soon!
Great emotional writing.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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After taking a crash course in the genetic misconceptions of children born of incest I hope the next few chapters will be both interesting and informative. I am thrilled you are continuing to enjoy this story and from this point on the story will progress at a faster rate.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hi,
This wasn't boring.
I liked it.
Good descriptions.
Interesting bit about psychology.
You are such a good storyteller, and you're so good at describing things.
Good at dialogue too.
I like how you ended it.
Katie
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Hi,
This wasn't boring.
I liked it.
Good descriptions.
Interesting bit about psychology.
You are such a good storyteller, and you're so good at describing things.
Good at dialogue too.
I like how you ended it.
Katie
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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I am glad you didn't find it boring...I was a little concerned. Thanks for the great review and your continued interest in this story.
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You're welcome. :)
Comment from whitteron
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I think I missed a chapter and will back track. I haven't been feeling well and hit a writer's block. I think I'm coming back now that the sun is out again. ....this is good and keeps moving forward. James is familiar with incest?
Oh no.....
sound asleep.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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I think I missed a chapter and will back track. I haven't been feeling well and hit a writer's block. I think I'm coming back now that the sun is out again. ....this is good and keeps moving forward. James is familiar with incest?
Oh no.....
sound asleep.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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No, it is one of the few subjects he isn't familiar with, but give him a little time at the library and he will be an expert. I understand the writer's block and also do much better in a sunny environment. Take your time, we will all be here when you are ready to come back.
Comment from RebelRose
The news James received in the last chapter was a lot to process. It's understandable they would need time. A break would definitely be called for but I am anxious to see what else Mom knows and what James finds at the library. Another great chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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The news James received in the last chapter was a lot to process. It's understandable they would need time. A break would definitely be called for but I am anxious to see what else Mom knows and what James finds at the library. Another great chapter.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Yes, James and Mom need time to adjust. I hope to post another chapter either tomorrow or on Wednesday. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Gungalo
Sigh, I don't envy him his hunt for information. He has a rather large chore to do to answer all of his questions and it seems he still fully intends to do that.
Loving this write so far, you!!!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Sigh, I don't envy him his hunt for information. He has a rather large chore to do to answer all of his questions and it seems he still fully intends to do that.
Loving this write so far, you!!!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you very much. Yes, James is a very determined young man.
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Gonna be very interesting to see what he does!!
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
As usual this plot defies anyone to treat it offhandedly. The depth and details of its intricacies continue to fascinate me. The hurt and frustration of the main character are almost palpable.
Giddy
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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As usual this plot defies anyone to treat it offhandedly. The depth and details of its intricacies continue to fascinate me. The hurt and frustration of the main character are almost palpable.
Giddy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much. I always look forward to your reviews. I am pleased you continue to enjoy this one.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this chapter where he decides to get out of the house in order to think more clearly. i enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this chapter where he decides to get out of the house in order to think more clearly. i enjoyed it.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thanks, I am pleased you liked this one. I figured both James and the reader need a break after his talk with Mom.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Smurfgirl ...
This is the first chapter of your book which I have had the opportunity to read and, from what I gather, it must be an interesting story.
There are just two small changes to suggest ...
* You have - with no means to defend myself. I suggest -
with no means of defending myself. OR ... with nothing with which to defend myself.
* You have - the worse it would likely get. I suggest -
the worse it was likely to get.
* Just once, you have used a filthy word which, although it is considered part of normal speech these days, diminishes your otherwise high standard of writing. Such words are really so unnecessary.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Hullo Smurfgirl ...
This is the first chapter of your book which I have had the opportunity to read and, from what I gather, it must be an interesting story.
There are just two small changes to suggest ...
* You have - with no means to defend myself. I suggest -
with no means of defending myself. OR ... with nothing with which to defend myself.
* You have - the worse it would likely get. I suggest -
the worse it was likely to get.
* Just once, you have used a filthy word which, although it is considered part of normal speech these days, diminishes your otherwise high standard of writing. Such words are really so unnecessary.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for pointing out those two sentences. I will go back and see what I can do to make them smoother.
Comment from Terry wrote
This quiet night alone was just the break that the reader needed, or I found it helpful, anyway, to think with him about what he'd learned, and about what he has yet to learn. I'm hooked!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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This quiet night alone was just the break that the reader needed, or I found it helpful, anyway, to think with him about what he'd learned, and about what he has yet to learn. I'm hooked!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for your enthusiastic review and awesome 6 stars. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one. Yes, James and the reader definitely needed a break.
Comment from Dale95
Wow, this subject matter is really intriguing me. This is the exact same thing I am working on in my novel.
Psychology??? How can one person successful brain wash another. And more importantly, why is it legal, and so common. Something is missing in our culture and maybe we can sort it out. I'm going to the library too.
Write On Smurphgirl. - Dale
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Wow, this subject matter is really intriguing me. This is the exact same thing I am working on in my novel.
Psychology??? How can one person successful brain wash another. And more importantly, why is it legal, and so common. Something is missing in our culture and maybe we can sort it out. I'm going to the library too.
Write On Smurphgirl. - Dale
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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This is something that has fascinated me my entire life. Glad you found it intriguing. James is a fun character, he may only be 19, but way ahead of everyone else.
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And that is exactly the point that I'm confused about. Age seems to have nothing to do with it. He is only 19 but he is far more mature than his mother??? mystery!!!
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Technically James's maturity is only related to his high IQ. Normally, he doesn't do well with interaction with people and if given a choice would spend his time with his head in a book rather than have to talk to someone. But he has been forced to grow up very, very fast and the burden of taking care of the family has fallen on his shoulders. His mother has never been more than a robot carefully constructed by his demanding and dominating father. On the surface she is the perfect mother and wife, but has great difficulty thinking for herself. James, on the other hand, may be a shy/geek but he is also a quick study. Experiencing and expressing emotions is new for him. Unlike his brother who has a temper and doesn't hesitate to show it. His relationship with Mac has helped bring James into the real world and out of the library. Having a father that is guilty of killing 12 young girls is foreign territory for most people and it becomes a learn as you go experience for everyone.
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Thanks, Dale