The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Some Things Are Best Left Alone"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from Gungalo
My gosh, what a convoluted family story this one is. Jeesh girl, you really know how to conjure them up don't you? Wicked awesome write here and your characters are vivid and strong. I love the bare bones writing you do. No over-flowery fillers and no reasons to drag it out. Well done and now can't wait to see for sure!!! Just love the story you!!!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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My gosh, what a convoluted family story this one is. Jeesh girl, you really know how to conjure them up don't you? Wicked awesome write here and your characters are vivid and strong. I love the bare bones writing you do. No over-flowery fillers and no reasons to drag it out. Well done and now can't wait to see for sure!!! Just love the story you!!!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Like I said before, I have had lots of experience with dysfunctional families...lots of fun/strange stuff to draw upon. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
Yes, family secrets are better left buried in the sands of time. Grandfather Mathews was even worse than I had imagined.
I remember when I was eighteen, in a fit of anger my mother confessed to me that James Callahan, who she had always held out to me as an example of a womanizing drunk was mostly a fabric of her imagination. He had abandoned her when she was pregnant with me, but the reason was her affair with my real father, a distinguished journalist from a distinguished family of writers and scientists. I felt betrayed by the lies that were in my conception and the fact that I was denied the legacy of my distinguished family. I would surely have felt better never knowing the truth, over finding out too late to benefit. So far as I know my real father never knew I existed, but the truth of his parentage is certain. I looked exactly like him as I grew older.
Now James knows that his father was the product of incest, but is the secret of what happened to his grandmother/aunt even darker? I'm ready to find out.
Now I am sending you some virtual Irish hugs together with six well-deserved stars.
Love and hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Hi Valerie:)
Yes, family secrets are better left buried in the sands of time. Grandfather Mathews was even worse than I had imagined.
I remember when I was eighteen, in a fit of anger my mother confessed to me that James Callahan, who she had always held out to me as an example of a womanizing drunk was mostly a fabric of her imagination. He had abandoned her when she was pregnant with me, but the reason was her affair with my real father, a distinguished journalist from a distinguished family of writers and scientists. I felt betrayed by the lies that were in my conception and the fact that I was denied the legacy of my distinguished family. I would surely have felt better never knowing the truth, over finding out too late to benefit. So far as I know my real father never knew I existed, but the truth of his parentage is certain. I looked exactly like him as I grew older.
Now James knows that his father was the product of incest, but is the secret of what happened to his grandmother/aunt even darker? I'm ready to find out.
Now I am sending you some virtual Irish hugs together with six well-deserved stars.
Love and hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Thanks so much for the Irish hugs. You will just have to wait and see what James uncovers next. I am thrilled you liked this one. My father had a similar story to yours, it turned him against women. He never trusted them after he discovered the truth.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
I'm going to have to catch up. This is a good chapter. I had no problem with it, and did not spot a SNAG or typo. Again good job, and it makes perfect sense why his mother kept quiet.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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I'm going to have to catch up. This is a good chapter. I had no problem with it, and did not spot a SNAG or typo. Again good job, and it makes perfect sense why his mother kept quiet.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Not your usual dinner conversation. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Whoa!
This is good.
Very powerful.
Interesting.
Emotional
Good descriptions.
Great dialogue.
You take the reader right there.
Great chapter and good ending.
One spag: 10th paragraph, 1st line: fist should be first
Katie
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Whoa!
This is good.
Very powerful.
Interesting.
Emotional
Good descriptions.
Great dialogue.
You take the reader right there.
Great chapter and good ending.
One spag: 10th paragraph, 1st line: fist should be first
Katie
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Thanks for catching the spag. I am thrilled you liked this one. Lots more secrets to unfold as the story move along.
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Cool! And you're welcome.
katie
Comment from Dale95
Wow, this is some good writing. Sociopaths aren't born, they are created and they continue the process on full circle with their victims. These control freaks and their tactics need to be exposed in the very beginning.
Sorry for the rant.
Write On, - Dale
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Wow, this is some good writing. Sociopaths aren't born, they are created and they continue the process on full circle with their victims. These control freaks and their tactics need to be exposed in the very beginning.
Sorry for the rant.
Write On, - Dale
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Rant away, you are also right. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from c_lucas
Most abusive male parent will abuse the children, especially their daughters. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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Most abusive male parent will abuse the children, especially their daughters. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Sadly, that is so very true. Glad you liked this one.
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You're welcome, Sasha. Charlie
Comment from Joan E.
I admired the way you captured the transformation of James' mother, when he took on his father's authoritative tone. I did not remember the twist of James' aunt also being his father's mother--yes, new meaning to "somethings are best left alone." -Joan
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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I admired the way you captured the transformation of James' mother, when he took on his father's authoritative tone. I did not remember the twist of James' aunt also being his father's mother--yes, new meaning to "somethings are best left alone." -Joan
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Yes, that is one of the major changes to the story. There are still several more to come. Glad you liked this one.
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I'm glad I was paying attention! A compelling addition to the story- Joan
Comment from animatqua
Ah, doling out bits and pieces at a time. This is quite a revelation, but obviously nowhere near the last, or even the deepest secret.
You have a real talent for this kind of writing.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Ah, doling out bits and pieces at a time. This is quite a revelation, but obviously nowhere near the last, or even the deepest secret.
You have a real talent for this kind of writing.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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You are correct, there are more secrets waiting to be revealed. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Deejharrington
Now we know at least part of the terrible secret that had been hidden all these years. Horrible enough to remain hidden but had to come out eventually. But there is more to come, and probably even worse. Beautiful job of describing how hard it was for James's mother to speak of these things. It was a physical and mental anguish. The reader felt sorry for the terrible damage the father did to this woman. Very well penned!
deb
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Now we know at least part of the terrible secret that had been hidden all these years. Horrible enough to remain hidden but had to come out eventually. But there is more to come, and probably even worse. Beautiful job of describing how hard it was for James's mother to speak of these things. It was a physical and mental anguish. The reader felt sorry for the terrible damage the father did to this woman. Very well penned!
deb
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Thanks for the great review. Yes, there are more secrets to be revealed...can't tell them all at the same time.
Comment from adewpearl
I asked as gently as I could, hoping I didn't sound - add the comma
you've never been in love, have you -add comma
oh, the father is the child of incest - that certainly is one deep, dark family secret.
This is one intense conversation, Valerie. Brooke
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I asked as gently as I could, hoping I didn't sound - add the comma
you've never been in love, have you -add comma
oh, the father is the child of incest - that certainly is one deep, dark family secret.
This is one intense conversation, Valerie. Brooke
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Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Yes it is. This is just the tip of the iceberg. James has far too many unanswered questions to leave this one alone.