Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Joan"A complete story in written as a poem.
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Comment from Ann Smith
Thank you for this look into the years of your youth. Isn't it amazing how often this very thing happens? If we could go back in time we would probably be a lot nicer to others. Often we built up barriers because of fear or insecurities. The poem has good details, rhythm, and rhyme. Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you for this look into the years of your youth. Isn't it amazing how often this very thing happens? If we could go back in time we would probably be a lot nicer to others. Often we built up barriers because of fear or insecurities. The poem has good details, rhythm, and rhyme. Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Wow! You made my day with the six star rating. Thank you so much for the review and you insightful comments.
Beth
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You are welcome. ann
Comment from sizemore0409
Hi Beth! What a delightful poem! It flows quite well, with clear sharp imagery and human emotion and observations about common human experience all well-woven into the fabric of the poem. The rhyme scheme brings a smile, as well. Plus, the ending was fantastic! I greatly enjoyed it! Andy
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Hi Beth! What a delightful poem! It flows quite well, with clear sharp imagery and human emotion and observations about common human experience all well-woven into the fabric of the poem. The rhyme scheme brings a smile, as well. Plus, the ending was fantastic! I greatly enjoyed it! Andy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much Andy. I really appreciate the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Veekz
Was not expecting that ending and it made me laugh at the irony of it all! :) It's a good reminder to keep those emotions in check too as we never know what the other person is thinking, as proved in this poem lol. Great rhymes, nice flow.
Thanks for the fab little read :)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Was not expecting that ending and it made me laugh at the irony of it all! :) It's a good reminder to keep those emotions in check too as we never know what the other person is thinking, as proved in this poem lol. Great rhymes, nice flow.
Thanks for the fab little read :)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. I'm glad you liked the ending.
Beth
Comment from RKagan
Hi Beth, this is so honest and so real. It is true that we have no idea how others really see us. And sometimes we think they are so high above us when in fact they feel the same way we do. This is so true and so excellent my friend.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Hi Beth, this is so honest and so real. It is true that we have no idea how others really see us. And sometimes we think they are so high above us when in fact they feel the same way we do. This is so true and so excellent my friend.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely and insightful comments.
Beth
Comment from Magics02
First let me say I love that movie in your picture with Jane Fonda and this poem is very well written. Tells a story of truth in it. There was one line and correct me if I am not correct please in this:
In time she because my rival.
Did you mean In time she became my rival?
Other then that great job my friend
Blessings
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First let me say I love that movie in your picture with Jane Fonda and this poem is very well written. Tells a story of truth in it. There was one line and correct me if I am not correct please in this:
In time she because my rival.
Did you mean In time she became my rival?
Other then that great job my friend
Blessings
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. I'm especially grateful to you for catching the type. I did me became.
Beth
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I with eagle eye only capture a moment in a word by and by:) You are so welcome my dear poetic friend
Comment from adewpearl
Beth, read aloud, your poem has a steady cadence and good abcb rhyme, and you use descriptive detail well to develop this character so that you make your point most effectively. You build up to the moral of the story well. Brooke
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Beth, read aloud, your poem has a steady cadence and good abcb rhyme, and you use descriptive detail well to develop this character so that you make your point most effectively. You build up to the moral of the story well. Brooke
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you Brooke, I really appreciate the review and the lovely comments.
Beth