The Golden Years
Getting Old Is Not Much Fun40 total reviews
Comment from jclark
Very funny but so, so true! You made me smile with all your "familiar" references to aging and your picture choice fit nicely with your flowing verse. Good luck in the contest.
Judy
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Very funny but so, so true! You made me smile with all your "familiar" references to aging and your picture choice fit nicely with your flowing verse. Good luck in the contest.
Judy
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thanks Judy for your review and good luck wishes.
Comment from fictionwriter
This is funny, but only because it's so true. There are all the things we hate about getting old, but have no control over. Great job.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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This is funny, but only because it's so true. There are all the things we hate about getting old, but have no control over. Great job.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thanks for your review and have a nice evening.
Comment from Valkarie
Oh my goodness I feel damn old, and you know its my birthday in a couple of weeks Oh Nooooo! This is a creative and fun poem that has a very good rhyming system and rhythm which in turn captures the tension of the piece. The visual side is powerful and one can see this person in character, worrying about old age. Your dialogue is brilliant and well thought out making this poem a well written piece.
Valkarie...
You are as young as you feel!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Oh my goodness I feel damn old, and you know its my birthday in a couple of weeks Oh Nooooo! This is a creative and fun poem that has a very good rhyming system and rhythm which in turn captures the tension of the piece. The visual side is powerful and one can see this person in character, worrying about old age. Your dialogue is brilliant and well thought out making this poem a well written piece.
Valkarie...
You are as young as you feel!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thank you Valkarie for that wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Remember, "You are as old as you feel also".
Comment from allborn66
This is a very cute poem. I like the word choice. I like the flow that it has. I like the humorous tone and rhyming sequence.
Barbara
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This is a very cute poem. I like the word choice. I like the flow that it has. I like the humorous tone and rhyming sequence.
Barbara
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thanks Barbara for your review. Have a great day.
Comment from clayzy
Since I am getting up there myself this poem certainly resonates with me in he funny-but not funny category. Well done, easy read and good rhyming. Clay
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Since I am getting up there myself this poem certainly resonates with me in he funny-but not funny category. Well done, easy read and good rhyming. Clay
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thanks Clay for your time and review. Have a great day.
Comment from Triple P
A friend of mine once said, 'The Golden Years ain't so golden.'
I think he would've enjoyed your poem a lot, as I have. Very well done.
Blessings,
Patrick.
P.S. I'm only 38, but definitely notice I'm getting older.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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A friend of mine once said, 'The Golden Years ain't so golden.'
I think he would've enjoyed your poem a lot, as I have. Very well done.
Blessings,
Patrick.
P.S. I'm only 38, but definitely notice I'm getting older.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thanks Patrick. Your friend was right, they ain't so golden for a lot of us. I think keeping your weight down and staying active
are the main ingredients. Thanks
Comment from LumchuckHickle
Nicely done, and...believe me...I know just how you feel. I liked many of your stanzas. I think the third from the end is the best one. The only stanza I think could be improved is the second from the end. The first two lines are great, but you've already made the point about sex in the stanza just before, so another target would work better as a punchline here. That's just a minor quibble. I really did like the poem. Great job. Now go make some tea, put your legs under a comforter, turn on the TV to something exciting, turn the volume way up so you can hear it, and then nod off while the kettle boils over in the kitchen. Okay? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Nicely done, and...believe me...I know just how you feel. I liked many of your stanzas. I think the third from the end is the best one. The only stanza I think could be improved is the second from the end. The first two lines are great, but you've already made the point about sex in the stanza just before, so another target would work better as a punchline here. That's just a minor quibble. I really did like the poem. Great job. Now go make some tea, put your legs under a comforter, turn on the TV to something exciting, turn the volume way up so you can hear it, and then nod off while the kettle boils over in the kitchen. Okay? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thanks my friend for such a wonderful review and suggestion. I think I could take all the things you mentioned and write another one. Have a great day.
Comment from Matoshka
Boy can I relate to this one. Getting older is not easy and things don't work like they did. I loved how your story came together and gave a definite description of getting older. I did smile tho as I could relate. I think the guy in the picture has a comb over. Loved your poem.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Boy can I relate to this one. Getting older is not easy and things don't work like they did. I loved how your story came together and gave a definite description of getting older. I did smile tho as I could relate. I think the guy in the picture has a comb over. Loved your poem.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your time and review. I'm certainly glad that you enjoyed it. Have a good day.
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You are so very welcome.
Comment from InHisownwrite
This is definitely a great contender for the Not Funny but Funny Contest...... Who can't relate to it?
Well, probably a teenager, but the rest of us sure can....
Love the teeth in a jar, hair in the comb....
But most of all the lights tuned off to save energy instead of sex..... Too funny! Good for you!
16 stars from the heart! Bryan
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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This is definitely a great contender for the Not Funny but Funny Contest...... Who can't relate to it?
Well, probably a teenager, but the rest of us sure can....
Love the teeth in a jar, hair in the comb....
But most of all the lights tuned off to save energy instead of sex..... Too funny! Good for you!
16 stars from the heart! Bryan
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thank you very much Bryan for that great review. You have a wonderful day!!
Comment from percival86jack
Wonderfully brilliant!!! Something I could easily have written... absolutely loved it! I relate to it in every way, my friend! Kudos... cheers, Jack
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Wonderfully brilliant!!! Something I could easily have written... absolutely loved it! I relate to it in every way, my friend! Kudos... cheers, Jack
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thank you Jack for that wonderful review. I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Have a great day.
