Reviews from

Redemption

Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Old Friends"
One Man's Return From Hell

31 total reviews 
Comment from Tellis
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

That way, if I have to shoot Boudreaux, the blood won't get on the carpet.I liked this sentence a lot. It made me laugh. Great chapter.

Tellis

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Thanks Tellis - I'm glad that you read and enjoyed!
Comment from humpwhistle
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Okay, this story is moving along nicely. I particularly liked the cliff-hanger ending. One question. I was under the impression Dax would be staying in the barn/studio, as opposed to the main house. Did I miss something?

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Hi Lee - in one of the past chapters, Beth decided that this was the South, and in the South, watch dog's didn't sleep outside, they slept in the "big house". Thanks for reading and your kind words. Regards, Bill
reply by humpwhistle on 01-Oct-2010
    My mistake, Bill. Thanks for setting me straight. I must have missed a chapter.

    Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    I'm just totally delighted that you're following the story. Thanks a bunch!
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

What in the hell is this guy up to? - add question mark
Yeah, I do, Dax - add the second comma for direct address
You do a great job of building suspense in the beginning of this chapter and then a sense of intrigue once they start talking to the intruder. And you end with a good cliffhanger, to top it all off. Excellent dialogue, too :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Thank you Brooke - it means a lot to me that you stop by and always are trying to help me get better. Regards, Bill
Comment from Jen Gentry
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I always love it when I am going thru chapters for review when the author takes the time to give background info on the book and characters. Helps me to see the whole picture. This chapter is well written and obviously well edited I did not see any mistakes. It was an easy read and flowed very smoothly. Enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Thank you Christa - it is awkward sometimes realizing that some people are going to drop by for the first time. I appreciate your kind words. Regards, Bill
Comment from marcii
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Wow, that was sure an interesting read, the big bad drug lord ex DEA agent does his own breakin.
Well written.
Now I have caught up on your story I can say that except for your spoiler it has been a marvelous story to read.
Look forward to reading more.
Marcii

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Thanks Marcii - I very much appreciate you reading and for your kind words!
Comment from InHisownwrite
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Well my friend...
All I can say is that it takes a special talent to write this kind of material.... And I couldn't do it........
You seem to know alot about this whole world, and if you don't, it really comes across that you do..... Every chapter gets deeper and deeper, and better and better.....
I always look forward to what will happen next!
Love it! Bryan

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Thank you Bryan - I appreciate your continuing support to this story. Regards, Bill
Comment from lola29
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I love this story, and this chapter is a very scary-good read. I'm not sure about Gus--I mean he did cross to the other side, so it seems he would be looking out for his own interest instead of Beth's. I'm eager to read how Dax handles this situtation.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Hi Lola - Gus is going to come out with mixed grades. Stay tuned! Bill
Comment from Shirley B
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Great story. One that I am glad I will be following. I love a good mystery. I can tell this is one with a lot of good twist and turns. I am glad I am one of your fans now, so I won't miss anything, Shirley

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Hi Shirley - I'm glad you stopped by too! If you haven't read from the beginning, a few minutes to read chapters 1 and 2 would throw you right in the mix. My fingers will be crossed for the Sooners this weekend!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Pretty close to perfect. Good job. Good plot and good characters.


Dax looked at Beth. "Beth?" (Too many Beths, try: Dax looked at her. "Beth?")

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010

reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    Barbara - like Dax is getting towards Beth - I'm getting to like you better all the time! Thanks for reading, your kind words and the gift of a six. Hope you are feeling better. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from c_lucas
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

You have a good mystery.thriller going here. This is very well written with good character development. It seems like Dax will have to deal with an old acquaintance. Good job.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010

reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    Hi Charlie - I very much appreciate your support of this story. Regards, Bill
reply by c_lucas on 30-Sep-2010
    You're welcome, Bill. Charlie