Comment from Soledadpaz

Excellent

Pupa,
Fix "bear" you mean (bare)

I love your poem. It says so much about the troubles and tribulations we bring unto ourselves and then wonder why we are facing such stress.

This poem reminds me of the last lines to the movie I Heart Huckabees. They are going to chain themselves to some fence in protest and one character asks another "Do we bring our own chains?" And the response is "We always do."

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010

Thanks so much Sole, I laughed when I read that 'bear' I put in my poem!! I appreciate your help and kind review.
Love
Pupa

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

Clinical but well stated. My own background has depressive episodes so if yours is some of the same I can well relate to this poem. As a "pupa' I hope you will continue to emerge. Thank you.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010

Hi Alan,
Thanks for your kind review and comments. Unfortunately I do have depressive episodes.
Love
Pupa

Comment from JoAnna77

Excellent

It is a wise person who can admit when they are the cause of their own troubles! I like this poem, which has a nice flow, and I like the unusual way you write here - addressing the chains in a letter. Lovely!

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010

Thanks so much, JoAnn, so glad you liked it.
Love
Pupa

Comment from anabelle

Excellent

Really good poem. It's true we often cause ourselves pain and misery by not trusting in ourself. Sometimes I think we just sell ourselves way too short.

Thanks. I enjoyed this.

Regards, anabelle

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010

Thanks ababelle, so glad you liked it.
Love
Pupa

reply by anabelle on 23-Jul-2010

You're very welcome.

Comment from judelesemann

Excellent

This is well written. I could just feel your feeling of being chained up and struggling to break free. You really have a gift for writing. Be blessed, Jude

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 Comment Written 22-Jul-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010

Glad you felt what I conveyed in this letter/poem. Thanks for your most encouraging comments and compliment.
Love
Pupa

Comment from NadineM

Excellent

Pupa,
I liked your poem and letter very much. I often feel the same way about things in my life that I know I have the power to change but something holds me back. Your writing today is very meaningful and powerful.
I few spots to consider:

"take off your loads of deep blues.(,)"

"Then bear(bare) foot"

"regain my lost will power. (willpower)"

Good job, my friend! Not only in the writing but in the realizations!!
Thanks for sharing this with me.

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 Comment Written 22-Jul-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010

Thanks Nadine, also for your support.
Love
Pupa