Jack and Chloe
finding a good life together27 total reviews
Comment from patmedium
What a lovely story. I actually sit here with my heart bursting with emotion. About a blooming fairy tale ( well, a doggy tail, anyway!)
I have thoroughly enjoyed this, Connie, thank you. No spag to be seen, just a tear on my cheek! Pat.
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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What a lovely story. I actually sit here with my heart bursting with emotion. About a blooming fairy tale ( well, a doggy tail, anyway!)
I have thoroughly enjoyed this, Connie, thank you. No spag to be seen, just a tear on my cheek! Pat.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Pat, for your very nice review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Connie
Comment from Belinda
This is cute. So Chloe and Jack are dogs. It would be better still, though, if you can keep the surprise until the last paragraph. As it is, interesting...
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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This is cute. So Chloe and Jack are dogs. It would be better still, though, if you can keep the surprise until the last paragraph. As it is, interesting...
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Belinda. About your suggestion, I tried really hard to hold off on the surprise as long as possible, but I didn't want to make the story too long for fear of losing readers. Thanks again. Connie
Comment from closetpoetjester
Hey there lady writer this was really good, I had no idea about the canine angle and it was quite cleverly orchestrated.
Well written and narrated with choice descriptives. Flow was good and I remained interested from start to finish. I even shed a little tear as they both got to go. Nice job girl.
A resounding five!
Cheers closet xo
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Hey there lady writer this was really good, I had no idea about the canine angle and it was quite cleverly orchestrated.
Well written and narrated with choice descriptives. Flow was good and I remained interested from start to finish. I even shed a little tear as they both got to go. Nice job girl.
A resounding five!
Cheers closet xo
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you! Being a dog lover, this was a fun one to write; and I'm glad you were surprised to learn they were dogs. I look forward to reading your postings today. Connie
Comment from hfriscia
This is a very interesting story to read...The flow is great, easy to read, no mistakes that I can see...The work kept my attention through out...
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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This is a very interesting story to read...The flow is great, easy to read, no mistakes that I can see...The work kept my attention through out...
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. Connie C
Comment from Dom G Robles
This is a beautiful story of Chloe and Jack. I thought at the beginning that these two are real persons but in the end I found out they were beautiful animals that were taken out of a home and were ready to die at one moment in time--Chloe in 10 days and Jack in a day or 2. The author has systematically personalized the two dogs--a cute Pomeranian and the other, a big one. I like the way the author portrayed how the cute dog, Chloe, tried to impress--entice the owners--Chloe trying to run around and go to Jack which finally gave the chance for the owners to own the dog, Jack, as well. In the end, the family got the two dogs together and bring them home, thus saving both the dogs from eternal extinction. Gosh, it is a fine story one of the best in the last two months that I was reading in Fanstory. Dom
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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This is a beautiful story of Chloe and Jack. I thought at the beginning that these two are real persons but in the end I found out they were beautiful animals that were taken out of a home and were ready to die at one moment in time--Chloe in 10 days and Jack in a day or 2. The author has systematically personalized the two dogs--a cute Pomeranian and the other, a big one. I like the way the author portrayed how the cute dog, Chloe, tried to impress--entice the owners--Chloe trying to run around and go to Jack which finally gave the chance for the owners to own the dog, Jack, as well. In the end, the family got the two dogs together and bring them home, thus saving both the dogs from eternal extinction. Gosh, it is a fine story one of the best in the last two months that I was reading in Fanstory. Dom
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and for the six stars too! I am so happy that you liked it and that you thought at the beginning that Jack and Chloe were people. That was my intention, so I guess it worked. Thank you again. Connie C
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That was a good surprise--Jack and Choe, thank you, too. Dom
Comment from kellyolsen
What a sweet, endearing story. Any dog lover would love to read this. I like how you built up to the revelation that the story wasn't actually about a snooty young woman wondering if she would compromise her standards. I love your use of proper English and grammar. Great job...Kelly
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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What a sweet, endearing story. Any dog lover would love to read this. I like how you built up to the revelation that the story wasn't actually about a snooty young woman wondering if she would compromise her standards. I love your use of proper English and grammar. Great job...Kelly
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Kelly. I was hoping it wasn't real obvious at first that this was about two dogs, so I guess it worked! There are so many cute pictures of dogs on FanArt that I wanted to use but didn't want to give anything away. Thanks again. Connie
Comment from Monte Carbolic
What a cute story. Definitely touched the animal lover in me. This one really tugs at the heartstrings and inspires a good smile. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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What a cute story. Definitely touched the animal lover in me. This one really tugs at the heartstrings and inspires a good smile. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Monte, for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Connie C