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Comment from btruax
What a fun story. Very enjoyable. And a nice contrast of the main character and her heroines. We never are as brave as we hope to be. I hope Mike was a little concerned when she fainted.
One tiny correction:
on it's way back up I believe that should be its.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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What a fun story. Very enjoyable. And a nice contrast of the main character and her heroines. We never are as brave as we hope to be. I hope Mike was a little concerned when she fainted.
One tiny correction:
on it's way back up I believe that should be its.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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btruax,
Thanks for the generous comments and for the suggestion. I'll check that as asap. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Judith Ann
Definitely a twist at the end. I enjoyed this story and the wonderful ending. Well done, just a couple of typos, nothing to take away from the rating. -Judy
My smiling faced (typo?)
That's where the melodramatic comes in since I wasn't really impressing anyone since I was the only one there.(do you want to use since twice in the same sentence?)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Definitely a twist at the end. I enjoyed this story and the wonderful ending. Well done, just a couple of typos, nothing to take away from the rating. -Judy
My smiling faced (typo?)
That's where the melodramatic comes in since I wasn't really impressing anyone since I was the only one there.(do you want to use since twice in the same sentence?)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Judy,
Thank you for reading and enjoying the story. I always appreciate your encouragement. Have corrected the errors..Thank you..Carol
Comment from mermaids
This is different. You held my interest and I am glad the woman's husband was the kidnapper, a neat idea. You drew me into the story and I felt for the main character. Best wishes for the contest.
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This is different. You held my interest and I am glad the woman's husband was the kidnapper, a neat idea. You drew me into the story and I felt for the main character. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Mermaids,
Thank youso much for the generous comments and wishes. I truly appreciate the comments and your time. Smiles, CArol
Comment from misscookie
cHILD YOU ARE AMESS , THIS ONE LEFT A SMILE ON MY FACER. i'M TRULY LOST FOR WORDS. YES YOU HAD MY ATTENTION FROM THE BEING TO THE END SPECIAL THE END.
ONCE AGAIN YOUR RIGHT ON TIME I NEEDED SOM ETHING TO SNAP MEOUT OF THIS THING i'M IN.
THANKS MY FRIEND
THIS S A GOOD WRITE.
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cHILD YOU ARE AMESS , THIS ONE LEFT A SMILE ON MY FACER. i'M TRULY LOST FOR WORDS. YES YOU HAD MY ATTENTION FROM THE BEING TO THE END SPECIAL THE END.
ONCE AGAIN YOUR RIGHT ON TIME I NEEDED SOM ETHING TO SNAP MEOUT OF THIS THING i'M IN.
THANKS MY FRIEND
THIS S A GOOD WRITE.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Cookie,
Are you just now discovering that I'm a mess...been that way for a long time. LOL Glad you enjoyed. Smiles, CArol
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your very funny, take care
Comment from bayoupoet
This is a great, well written short story, Carol. You caught my attention at the beginning and held it throughout the exciting story. It is always a pleasure to read for you!
sandra
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This is a great, well written short story, Carol. You caught my attention at the beginning and held it throughout the exciting story. It is always a pleasure to read for you!
sandra
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Sandra,
Thankyou as always my friend. Glad you enjoyed. Smiles, CArol
Comment from hotstuff
Your story about being kidnapped certainly has a twist to it alright. A very sensual and romantic tale. The wedding anniversary present to top all presents I would say.
My smiling faced (face) greeted
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Your story about being kidnapped certainly has a twist to it alright. A very sensual and romantic tale. The wedding anniversary present to top all presents I would say.
My smiling faced (face) greeted
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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hotstuff,
Yesterday was my anniversary and I thought I'd revive a few memories for my honey...Glad you enjoyed. Smiles, CArol
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Carol,
I would like that kind of a surprise!! At first I thought she had really been kidnapped but started to suspect the husband. A delightful read that keeps one guessing to the end. Well done and good luck in the contest...blessings....chey
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Hi Carol,
I would like that kind of a surprise!! At first I thought she had really been kidnapped but started to suspect the husband. A delightful read that keeps one guessing to the end. Well done and good luck in the contest...blessings....chey
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Chey,
Yesterday was my anniversary so I thought I'd write a bit of history to remember. Thanks for the great review...a trip down memory lane isn't always bad. Smiles, Carol
Comment from c_lucas
You gave the kidnapper's identity away with her favorite song and familiar scent. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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You gave the kidnapper's identity away with her favorite song and familiar scent. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Charlie,
I know but in one of my last stories several people complained that I didn't give obvious clues...Thanks for commenting. Smiles, CArol
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You're welcome, Carol. Follow your heart. You are the creator of the story. Charlie
Comment from dmjones
I like this story too. Well written suspenseful until you find out. A good twist at the end.
the sun spread it's(its) warm,
and on it's(its) way back up,
comes in since I wasn't really impressing anyone since I was (I would get rid of one of these since. Maybe ...anyone. I was the only one there.)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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I like this story too. Well written suspenseful until you find out. A good twist at the end.
the sun spread it's(its) warm,
and on it's(its) way back up,
comes in since I wasn't really impressing anyone since I was (I would get rid of one of these since. Maybe ...anyone. I was the only one there.)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Donna,
Thanks for all the suggestions and encouragement. Appreciate hearing from you as always. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Sasha
Wonderful story and excellent twist at the end. I enjoyed this very, very much. This is definitely a perfect entry for the contest and I sincerely (yes, sincerely) wish you all the best. Really great story!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Wonderful story and excellent twist at the end. I enjoyed this very, very much. This is definitely a perfect entry for the contest and I sincerely (yes, sincerely) wish you all the best. Really great story!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Sasha,
Your comments are awesome and make me a winner regardless. Thank you so much for your generous thoughts. Smiles, Carol