Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "I'm Sorry To Tell You This....."Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
43 total reviews
Comment from L.lora
This was such a heart
warming and delightful
story. I really like
the explanations given the
little girl by her father and
especially liked your closing
lines. no nits or spags. Lora
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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This was such a heart
warming and delightful
story. I really like
the explanations given the
little girl by her father and
especially liked your closing
lines. no nits or spags. Lora
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Lora,
Thanks my dear friend for enjoying this little short. I too thought the little girl was clever and carried a wonderful message. (At least for us girls) Smiles, Carol
Comment from Rama Rao
LOL.
This is a very good repartee.
I enjoyed reading this short piece.
All I can add is to wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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LOL.
This is a very good repartee.
I enjoyed reading this short piece.
All I can add is to wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Ramarao,
Glad you found the humor in the little story. I enjoyed writing it as well. Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh so cute. I tend to agree, but I found my boys absolutely adorable growing up. Unfortunately they grew up to be men, once in awhile they have their moments. (LOL)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Oh so cute. I tend to agree, but I found my boys absolutely adorable growing up. Unfortunately they grew up to be men, once in awhile they have their moments. (LOL)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Barbara,
My boys have been easier to live with and appreciate than my girls any day, but the usual concept is the opposite. Smiles, Carol
Comment from patmedium
Carol... this is absolutely wonderful! WHAT a cracking good tale! I have really enjoyed reading this one... and that picture is gorgeous. Pat. xxx
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Carol... this is absolutely wonderful! WHAT a cracking good tale! I have really enjoyed reading this one... and that picture is gorgeous. Pat. xxx
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Pat,
Thankyou somuch for the wonderful review and encouragement. I always appreciate your thoughts. Carol
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I found no spags, dear... I do enjoy reading yours. Pat.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ...
This is most amusing and you have certainly provided plenty of vivid imagery for your readers. Using just over 300 words, you have told a complete and delightful story about an astute little girl and her observations about pretty girls and .... well, you wrote it so you should know what comes next!!
Thank you for sharing this with us and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Hullo Carol ...
This is most amusing and you have certainly provided plenty of vivid imagery for your readers. Using just over 300 words, you have told a complete and delightful story about an astute little girl and her observations about pretty girls and .... well, you wrote it so you should know what comes next!!
Thank you for sharing this with us and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Mamette,
Thank you again for stopping by and reading my efforts at flash fiction. I appreciate your time and thoughts as usual. Carol
Comment from Belinda
Wha-ha-ha, Carol, this is so hilarious. Beth is such a smart girl when she said her final comments on her brother. Of course the sexy waitress is smart too... Interesting read.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Wha-ha-ha, Carol, this is so hilarious. Beth is such a smart girl when she said her final comments on her brother. Of course the sexy waitress is smart too... Interesting read.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Belinda,
Glad you saw the humor in the little story. It was fun to write. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Sandollar
This was a very good story but not exactly what I had in mind when I organized this contest. It was meant to be straight two person dialogue. No action tags. With all the extraneous stuff included it becomes a story, and I just wanted dialogue.
However as a story it was great. I like the little girl's sense of humor and you wrote great dialogue. I'm sure it will do well in the contest. Best of luck.
I found no errors.
Sandollar
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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This was a very good story but not exactly what I had in mind when I organized this contest. It was meant to be straight two person dialogue. No action tags. With all the extraneous stuff included it becomes a story, and I just wanted dialogue.
However as a story it was great. I like the little girl's sense of humor and you wrote great dialogue. I'm sure it will do well in the contest. Best of luck.
I found no errors.
Sandollar
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Sandollar,
Sorry...when I wrote the story I wasn't aware of the full facts of only dialogue...I had checked a couple stories and they were regular stories so I posted mine. Sorry I goofed up your intentions but I am glad you enjoyed the story. Carol
Comment from spellbound
This made me laugh. Of course I heard this joke in other ways, but yours may become one of my favorite.
Out of the mouth of babes. They sure don't miss anything.
good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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This made me laugh. Of course I heard this joke in other ways, but yours may become one of my favorite.
Out of the mouth of babes. They sure don't miss anything.
good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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spellbound,
Glad you liked lmy take on the story...I never know what to expect from my darling grandchildren. They are so much more grown up these days and say the craziest things.
Carol
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Carol,
This has to be a true story! What a delight children are and then we grow up and become adults...just like puppies turn into dogs. This story delights me and I love every word of it. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Hi Carol,
This has to be a true story! What a delight children are and then we grow up and become adults...just like puppies turn into dogs. This story delights me and I love every word of it. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Chey,
It's not a true story but I am always amazed at the words that escape my little three year old granddaughter's mouth. She's turning into a teenager and growing up way to fast. Thanks for the comments. CArol
Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
Your little story is adorable. Cute art work. Cleverly written. Excellent writing, dialogue and narrative. I love the name Lake Wannabe. The lines I liked the best:
"Sure, honey, what is it?" Bible stories and proverbs rushed through his head as he prepared himself.
Setting the other two bowls in front of Beth and Mike, she gave James the biggest smile. "That's because all our flies are on vacation."
The little girl sounds like a typical sister making comments about her annoying brother with cooties. At that age many girls and boys think each other has cooties. I think of the saying 'out of the mouth of babes.' Your entry is a real contender for the writing prompt. Keep up the great writing. That's my 2 cents.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Carol,
Your little story is adorable. Cute art work. Cleverly written. Excellent writing, dialogue and narrative. I love the name Lake Wannabe. The lines I liked the best:
"Sure, honey, what is it?" Bible stories and proverbs rushed through his head as he prepared himself.
Setting the other two bowls in front of Beth and Mike, she gave James the biggest smile. "That's because all our flies are on vacation."
The little girl sounds like a typical sister making comments about her annoying brother with cooties. At that age many girls and boys think each other has cooties. I think of the saying 'out of the mouth of babes.' Your entry is a real contender for the writing prompt. Keep up the great writing. That's my 2 cents.
Melissa.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Melissa,
Yes, those younger sisters like to get in their zingers whenever they can...especially to Daddy. My little granddaughter is only three and I can already stand in shock at the thoughts that roll off her little tongue. Smiles, CArol
