Damaged Goods
A Poem72 total reviews
Comment from jlsavell
Curt Mongold, this was extremely painful to read and its savage story began to unfold. Your well chosen words have moved the reader emotions to the point of wanting to puke.
That almost sound like a backhanded compliment, but truly it isn't. The impeccable rhyme scheme complimented the poems tragic force. A powerful poem that I hope was not from experience, but somehow it is too real to not be..best wishes with the contest..jlsavell
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Curt Mongold, this was extremely painful to read and its savage story began to unfold. Your well chosen words have moved the reader emotions to the point of wanting to puke.
That almost sound like a backhanded compliment, but truly it isn't. The impeccable rhyme scheme complimented the poems tragic force. A powerful poem that I hope was not from experience, but somehow it is too real to not be..best wishes with the contest..jlsavell
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much,
C
Comment from MAMONIA
OMG! This is quite a teary, scary poem.
Hopefully this is not you or someone you knew.
It would give me nightmares to think of this
happening to a young boy. You wrote this poem
with skill and precision. There is not a word
out of place. The flow and rhythm are extremely
good, as the story is incredible. You did a
fabulous job in imagery and steal the show with
this entry. Best of luck. You certainly deserve
a win.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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OMG! This is quite a teary, scary poem.
Hopefully this is not you or someone you knew.
It would give me nightmares to think of this
happening to a young boy. You wrote this poem
with skill and precision. There is not a word
out of place. The flow and rhythm are extremely
good, as the story is incredible. You did a
fabulous job in imagery and steal the show with
this entry. Best of luck. You certainly deserve
a win.
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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Thank you.
C
Comment from eliz100
This is such a powerful message of childhood sexual abuse. At one point I did not want to keep reading but I would not allow myself that denial, I read to the end.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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This is such a powerful message of childhood sexual abuse. At one point I did not want to keep reading but I would not allow myself that denial, I read to the end.
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much,
C
Comment from jshep
You are always a challenging opponent, Curt. This is a powerful poem with incredible flow and rhyme and such a deeply emotional tale or truth. Congratulations on another nomination and this is quite worthy of the honor. I am left with the words 'your tore my body, killed my mind and I assumed that God was blind, and the songs linger. Very powerful stuff. Joyce
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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You are always a challenging opponent, Curt. This is a powerful poem with incredible flow and rhyme and such a deeply emotional tale or truth. Congratulations on another nomination and this is quite worthy of the honor. I am left with the words 'your tore my body, killed my mind and I assumed that God was blind, and the songs linger. Very powerful stuff. Joyce
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you Joyce,
I am deeply grateful for your thoughts.
C
Comment from sparky123
Hi Curt, I found that a very deep poem and also very brave to pen the feelings of unfortunately many children. I do believe perpertrators get their come-upperance at some time, not that it makes the child/adult feel any better.The way you expressed your escaping, singing your dreams, singing to be 'invisable'it wasn't you inside that bed bought home the feelings of the child. Welldone with 'All Time Best', very well deserved. Cheers. Sue
The bastards who do this should read your poem and face their victims.
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Hi Curt, I found that a very deep poem and also very brave to pen the feelings of unfortunately many children. I do believe perpertrators get their come-upperance at some time, not that it makes the child/adult feel any better.The way you expressed your escaping, singing your dreams, singing to be 'invisable'it wasn't you inside that bed bought home the feelings of the child. Welldone with 'All Time Best', very well deserved. Cheers. Sue
The bastards who do this should read your poem and face their victims.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Thanks Sue,
I wish they had the soul for guuilt, but many don't.
Curt
Comment from siobhand
I have to admit, i read it and couldnt comment...but it haunted me, the fact that I was not brave enough, that i could turn away so to speak from something so unpleasant. so I am back to comment. You are brave , this speaks so clearly of the horrors many children go through. I am sure your words will reach out to the world.
invisible and hull dont rhyme to me! difference in accents again.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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I have to admit, i read it and couldnt comment...but it haunted me, the fact that I was not brave enough, that i could turn away so to speak from something so unpleasant. so I am back to comment. You are brave , this speaks so clearly of the horrors many children go through. I am sure your words will reach out to the world.
invisible and hull dont rhyme to me! difference in accents again.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thanks my friend, I know if you commented, it wasn't for the big bucks, so I really do appreciate your thoughts and time.
How do you pronounce invisible?
Curt
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in vis a bill ..our I is very clipped in nz
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Curt,
This poem is almost to horrible to read. I can't imagine a mind that thinks hurting a child means nothing to the poor little soul. I believe this is a true story which makes it even more difficult to read. You wrote it very well and I would defy anyone to read it with a dry eye. Superb...chainy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Hi Curt,
This poem is almost to horrible to read. I can't imagine a mind that thinks hurting a child means nothing to the poor little soul. I believe this is a true story which makes it even more difficult to read. You wrote it very well and I would defy anyone to read it with a dry eye. Superb...chainy
Comment Written 20-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Hi Chainy,
Your thoughts are deeply touching to me and I honestly want to thank you for your time. I couldn't write it with a dry eye either.
Curt
Comment from L.lora
An excellently penned poem
even though the subject matter
is so deeply tragic and profound,
the meter and rhyme guide your
reader through the horrors of abuse.
God bless the child, and you. Lora
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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An excellently penned poem
even though the subject matter
is so deeply tragic and profound,
the meter and rhyme guide your
reader through the horrors of abuse.
God bless the child, and you. Lora
Comment Written 20-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thank you Lora,
Your thoughts are well received, and I am sure the child takes great comfort in the blessings, as do I.
Curt
Comment from connied
Very strong---makes me cringe reading about it--they should castrate these monsters and leave them tied up in the woods for the animals.
thank-you,
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Very strong---makes me cringe reading about it--they should castrate these monsters and leave them tied up in the woods for the animals.
thank-you,
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you my friend for the thoughts and most generous rating. While i never try to advocate violence, perhaps a little csatration would be in order.
Curt
Comment from visionupwards
This sure expresses the suffering of a lonesome child who experienced such an unwanted, treacherous and stolen life spent event. But I enjoyed the essence, the conviction in the words and the means to comprehrension.
Your poem has vision for the reader, scope for imagination, darkened thoughts to freely escape, but yet captivation prevails with intrigue of the outcome of the victim today.
I liked it.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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This sure expresses the suffering of a lonesome child who experienced such an unwanted, treacherous and stolen life spent event. But I enjoyed the essence, the conviction in the words and the means to comprehrension.
Your poem has vision for the reader, scope for imagination, darkened thoughts to freely escape, but yet captivation prevails with intrigue of the outcome of the victim today.
I liked it.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you so very much for your thoughts on this piece my friend, I truly apreciate your comments and time.
Curt