Contest Entry and Winners
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Taken"Short Stories
48 total reviews
Comment from amada
Congratulations in winning this contest. Very well deserved. This story captured me from the first line because it has a certain mystery on what was coming next. I wasn't surprised. Great!!!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Congratulations in winning this contest. Very well deserved. This story captured me from the first line because it has a certain mystery on what was coming next. I wasn't surprised. Great!!!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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amada
Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy my story. I am always thrilled when someone else finds pleasure in what I write. Thank you again. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from Terrilynn
What a great story! I liked how the author described the empty apartment. The old song, the faint scent of obsession, it was all so poignant and sad. I know I had tears in my eyes. What a joyous ending, such a nice surprise!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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What a great story! I liked how the author described the empty apartment. The old song, the faint scent of obsession, it was all so poignant and sad. I know I had tears in my eyes. What a joyous ending, such a nice surprise!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy my story. I am always thrilled when someone else finds pleasure in what I write. Thank you again. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from Changeisgood
You managed to get an upbeat ending out of some pretty sinister words. And I have to admit I didn't expect the ending. It was nice to have something good finally happen to that man. The writing held up; I didn't see any Spags.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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You managed to get an upbeat ending out of some pretty sinister words. And I have to admit I didn't expect the ending. It was nice to have something good finally happen to that man. The writing held up; I didn't see any Spags.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy my story. I am always thrilled when someone else finds pleasure in what I write. Thank you again. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from wierdgrace
This story was a winniner in my book, its story line is great, the excitement with the character, and the ending, wow, I loved it, good luck in this contest, no errors or revisions I could see. good luck
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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This story was a winniner in my book, its story line is great, the excitement with the character, and the ending, wow, I loved it, good luck in this contest, no errors or revisions I could see. good luck
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy my story. I am always thrilled when someone else finds pleasure in what I write. Thank you again. Smiles to you, Carol
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I am far behind, your are all welcome, only pasting this message to all today, so you all know I care.
Comment from --Turtle.
Lovely story. Emotional, engaging, action packed. Good dialog, the songs felt like an actual song. Felt for the characters. Well done, loved it. Happy ending was believable too, though it could have just as easily ended badly.
Good job. Glad I caught this.
--Nobody.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Lovely story. Emotional, engaging, action packed. Good dialog, the songs felt like an actual song. Felt for the characters. Well done, loved it. Happy ending was believable too, though it could have just as easily ended badly.
Good job. Glad I caught this.
--Nobody.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Turtle,
Awesome - Glad you enjoyed the story and I am overjoyed with your thoughts and stars. Truly appreciate them. Smiles to you, Carol
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I really felt for the guy in this one.
Comment from Metal Head
One big huge mistake. You just told everyone she's still alive.
This story is let down by the following line. Their faces were plastered on every television screen along with the woman who had identified them. I just can't see this happening, especially as they were notorious enough for the police to later put her into witness protection. You could have had a mole in the police force, or even had one of the original shooters recognizing a famous local artist. Just a thought.
But on the whole, this was a story I enjoyed.
Michael D
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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One big huge mistake. You just told everyone she's still alive.
This story is let down by the following line. Their faces were plastered on every television screen along with the woman who had identified them. I just can't see this happening, especially as they were notorious enough for the police to later put her into witness protection. You could have had a mole in the police force, or even had one of the original shooters recognizing a famous local artist. Just a thought.
But on the whole, this was a story I enjoyed.
Michael D
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Michael,
Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy my story. I greatly appreciate your comments. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from medel
Wow, cool story! It produces quite a roller coaster of emotions. I enjoyed the intensity, good dialogue, smooth flow. The only slight issue I had was that Janna had scars already formed on her face. I wasn't thinking that enough time had passed since the funeral for her to be fully healed from her injuries, but re-reading I guess it was plausible. Nice ending!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Wow, cool story! It produces quite a roller coaster of emotions. I enjoyed the intensity, good dialogue, smooth flow. The only slight issue I had was that Janna had scars already formed on her face. I wasn't thinking that enough time had passed since the funeral for her to be fully healed from her injuries, but re-reading I guess it was plausible. Nice ending!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Medel
Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy my story. I greatly appreciate your comments. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from patmedium
THIS is a wonderful story... not the subject matter, nor the gory descriptions...
But the way you have painted the two personalities so clearly and precisely.
Congratulations. Pat.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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THIS is a wonderful story... not the subject matter, nor the gory descriptions...
But the way you have painted the two personalities so clearly and precisely.
Congratulations. Pat.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Pat,
Thank you so much for the wonderful thoughts and stars. Truly a blessing. Carol
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with emotion, love, pain, everything seemed so real while reading it that you could feel his pain. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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this is very well written with emotion, love, pain, everything seemed so real while reading it that you could feel his pain. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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sweetwoodjax,
Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy my story. I greatly appreciate your comments. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from melyuki
well, now I can breathe again. I gripped my chair through this rather terrifying thriller dear sis, and thank God, the ending let me breathe once again,,, you sure can get the heart pumping with your dramatic horror stories sis,.
where oh where did this one come from,,, excellently written and now I am hiding under the covers... sending hugs to you and lots of luv, and dont blow my brains like this too often now,.. your little sis... xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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well, now I can breathe again. I gripped my chair through this rather terrifying thriller dear sis, and thank God, the ending let me breathe once again,,, you sure can get the heart pumping with your dramatic horror stories sis,.
where oh where did this one come from,,, excellently written and now I am hiding under the covers... sending hugs to you and lots of luv, and dont blow my brains like this too often now,.. your little sis... xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Comment Written 04-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
Thanks so much for just being you...Love Sis