Flash Fiction
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Comment from Rama Rao
A good story showing the loneliness of old people and what tricks it plays on their minds. It was all in his mind, and he played back all his happy days. He'd nothing left but his memories.
A very touching story indeed.
However, it was also a bit too sentimental.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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A good story showing the loneliness of old people and what tricks it plays on their minds. It was all in his mind, and he played back all his happy days. He'd nothing left but his memories.
A very touching story indeed.
However, it was also a bit too sentimental.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Ramarao,
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Comment from RebelRose
Oh, what a sweet and sad story. This same type of situation actually happens in real life. When one loses their mate, they follow soon after.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Oh, what a sweet and sad story. This same type of situation actually happens in real life. When one loses their mate, they follow soon after.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Patty,
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Comment from DearlB
This is a fine well written and complete story, this a difficult task in so few words. I found no spag problems.
You should do well in the contest.
best of luck,
Dearl
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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This is a fine well written and complete story, this a difficult task in so few words. I found no spag problems.
You should do well in the contest.
best of luck,
Dearl
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Dearl,
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Comment from adewpearl
What a beautifully poignant story - I love how you convey this man's thoughts and visions to us without any use of dialogue - I truly saw his vision with him and could tell the depth of his emotions for his departed wife. The ending nearly had me in tears. Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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What a beautifully poignant story - I love how you convey this man's thoughts and visions to us without any use of dialogue - I truly saw his vision with him and could tell the depth of his emotions for his departed wife. The ending nearly had me in tears. Brooke
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
Your poems move me so many times that I am thrilled that my story could move you as well. Thank you for the wonderful thoughts. Smiles to you...
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good flow, good visualization, good points of love and memory that i enjoyed reading. it was very moving and lovely. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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this is very well written with good flow, good visualization, good points of love and memory that i enjoyed reading. it was very moving and lovely. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
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sweetwoodjax
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Comment from anabelle
Beautiful story. I found this very touching and extremely well-written. The ending is fabulous.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Beautiful story. I found this very touching and extremely well-written. The ending is fabulous.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
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Anabelle.
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Comment from sunny39
An excellent entry for the contest. I could feel the chill and dampness of the air near the river.
The old man spoke volumns without saying a word. We knew why he was there, we knew about his wife, and we knew what happened at the end.
An excellent flash fiction with a beginning, a middle and an end and no dialogue.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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An excellent entry for the contest. I could feel the chill and dampness of the air near the river.
The old man spoke volumns without saying a word. We knew why he was there, we knew about his wife, and we knew what happened at the end.
An excellent flash fiction with a beginning, a middle and an end and no dialogue.
Good luck!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
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Sunny,
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Comment from hotstuff
OH, how very sad. It breaks my heart to think of old people being left alone in the world and your poem made me feel that way. The ending again was bitter sweet. Dying alone but with the image of his beloved wife greeting him. Very moving poetry. I really enjoyed this excellent story. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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OH, how very sad. It breaks my heart to think of old people being left alone in the world and your poem made me feel that way. The ending again was bitter sweet. Dying alone but with the image of his beloved wife greeting him. Very moving poetry. I really enjoyed this excellent story. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
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hotstuff,
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Comment from RazberryBullet
Poignant and well written :)
Liked these lines especially: Her love warmed his cold body. She smiled, stepped closer than usual, bending to gently kiss his cheek.
Lovely!
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Poignant and well written :)
Liked these lines especially: Her love warmed his cold body. She smiled, stepped closer than usual, bending to gently kiss his cheek.
Lovely!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
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Razzyberry,
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Comment from vandawalker
Excellent. I really enjoyed this writing. I think the old man is pictured clearly, and his memories and thoughts add to the emotional quality of the poem.
The kiss is a nice touch for the ending. You have used few words to tell a heartfelt story. Good work.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Excellent. I really enjoyed this writing. I think the old man is pictured clearly, and his memories and thoughts add to the emotional quality of the poem.
The kiss is a nice touch for the ending. You have used few words to tell a heartfelt story. Good work.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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vandawalker,
I appreciate all your comments and thoughts. Thank you for your review. Smiles to you...
