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Comment from Perp Ihebom
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This is a beautiful micro-fiction indeed. I assume that Drusilla wanted to be loved not for her beauty, but for who she was. I like the simple but rich plot. kudos

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
    Perp,

    You assumed perfectly right! Thanks for the wonderful review. Carol
Comment from Bob O
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Good luck in the contest. It is tough to write much of anything in 100 words. It is also tough to review it. You did a good job.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
    Bob,

    Yes..these short ones are hard to put a whole story in a few words. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Carol
Comment from L.lora
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I liked this Carol, what a
turn around. Your witch/female
character was one sharp cookie.
Excellently written, so much in
such few words and what a great
story. Good luck with the contest.
no nits or spags. Lora

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
    Lora,

    While the others primped, she went for love me for who I am not what you see...Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from Alison Williams
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Ohhh! Very nice and a great surprise. Well done. You've made a point here, that an ugly visage does not necessarily mean an ugly heart, and vice versa.

Love the use of names. Prince Gargoyle. Hehehe. Cute picture too.

One thing that hiccuped a little when I read, "A very ugly witch, happily, danced alone until the Prince approached." does the comma need to be after happily? By keeping it it seems to be a 'happy circumstance', by removing it, it sounds like she is dancing happily. So not sure which meaning you wanted to convey.

An excellent entry Carol. Good luck!

Alison. :)

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
    Alison,

    I fixed that..Guess I got comma crazy...or just plain crazy! LOL Appreciate the help and the review. Smiles, CArol
Comment from boberto
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Heck, I wouled have chosen her just for her socks. I have
a couple of pairs just like them. Good entry in the contest. Original and contains the parts required for
a story---any length.
good luck in the contest.
boberto

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010

    Boberto,

    Reminded me of the socks I buy my daughter at Christmas...the wackier the better. Thanks for the wonderful review. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Trybuck
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Micro-fiction of 100 words
Orange socks sound a bit absurd
You managed to give them a whirl
Maybe just maybe found a pearl
In this fantasy tale of a witch
Who came up with her own little glitch

Well done and hope it does well for you, Buck

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
    Buck,

    Thanks for stopping by to read this silly little ditty...Smiles, Carol
Comment from c_lucas
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This is very well written with a good twist at the end. There is a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

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    Charlie,

    Glad you enjoyed. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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This is cute. My youngest son, when he was in preschool and elementary school he had a thing for gargoyles. We were stationed in Germany and saw many of them on the buildigns. There was also a cartoon on TV at the time. I know this has nothing to do with your post, but it's just an old lady rambling.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
    Barbara,

    Hey, girl friend. Thanks for the story...glad you enjoyed mine. Smiles, Carol
Comment from melyuki
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well sis, I never did judge a book by its cover. and neither has your prince.. a great story, with a very vivid message for your readers to think about... i just luv the orange socks, tantelizing and so attractive, who wouldn't ask this wonderful piece for a dance.. Might have to get myself a pair for next valentines... hugs to you sis, a witty clever little tale.. luv Melxxx

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
    Sis,

    I buy Corrie crazy socks every Christmas...Wild and wacky stuff. Thanks for stopping by and saying hello..smiles, Sis
Comment from RebelRose
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This is very good and cute story. Just goes to show, you can't judge a book by its cover. Inside every ugly witch, there can be a beautiful person. I love the picture, that's a hoot.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
    Patty

    Thanks so much for the wonderful and generous review. Smiles, Carol