Danger On The Ice
contest entry25 total reviews
Comment from another jim
Good tale, one of my favorites in this comp! Pretty complex storytelling, considering the restrictions imposed by the contest. Nicely done!
Question: Did you mean to capitalize "They"? Conventional dialogue tags use lower case. Then again, there's nothing wrong with a little unconventionality, if that's what you were going for. LOL!
Best of luck in the contest...Jim.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Good tale, one of my favorites in this comp! Pretty complex storytelling, considering the restrictions imposed by the contest. Nicely done!
Question: Did you mean to capitalize "They"? Conventional dialogue tags use lower case. Then again, there's nothing wrong with a little unconventionality, if that's what you were going for. LOL!
Best of luck in the contest...Jim.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the great review and rating. Thanks also for the writing tip. I have changed it. I am so glad you enjoyed it. This was fun to write.
Comment from Kaiyah
nice rendition. a beautifl piece of work which seemed almost efforotless on your part.
well done with vivid imagery and incorporation of consistency in voice and structure
best of luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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nice rendition. a beautifl piece of work which seemed almost efforotless on your part.
well done with vivid imagery and incorporation of consistency in voice and structure
best of luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much for the wonderful review and rating. I appreciate your support.
Comment from MAMONIA
What a great scene and story and all without an "s". It is amazing how you did this and accomplished such an outrageous work. I loved it. It is hysterical. I can feel the ice and cold just the way you describe. Great job. I wish you lots of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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What a great scene and story and all without an "s". It is amazing how you did this and accomplished such an outrageous work. I loved it. It is hysterical. I can feel the ice and cold just the way you describe. Great job. I wish you lots of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the great review and rating. It was fun to write. Thanks too, for the good wishes.
Comment from rogerpolly
Excellent. A wonderful description of a dramatic encounter with danger! The photo is dynamic, a perfect companion to your well written prose.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Excellent. A wonderful description of a dramatic encounter with danger! The photo is dynamic, a perfect companion to your well written prose.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had fun writing it. Thanks so much for the rating too.
Comment from MizKat
This is great. Prayer is best for every situation. It's funny when we try other things on our own before we remember what to do.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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This is great. Prayer is best for every situation. It's funny when we try other things on our own before we remember what to do.
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Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thanks for the great review and rating. You're right prayer shouldn't always be the last resort.
Thanks for reading.
Sandollar