POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
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Comment from ladyscarlet
I like this, it's really cute. I myself know what its like to be far away from a loved one. And it does bring a sort of peace when I know that we're looking at the same stars and moon.
Great job :)
God Bless,
~LadyScarlet
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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I like this, it's really cute. I myself know what its like to be far away from a loved one. And it does bring a sort of peace when I know that we're looking at the same stars and moon.
Great job :)
God Bless,
~LadyScarlet
Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Lady Scarlet
That's exactly what I was feeling. Thank you for reading and enjoying. Carol
Comment from melyuki
He Carol, I am twinkling, can you see me, so far away and yet so close. I could hardly get to bed before I read this. and now I will have the best sweet dreams all night long. I will be twinkling under the covers for at least a few precious hours of rest time. thank you so so much, I am honoured. I am going to print this off, and put it in a little frame next to the bed. HOw cute is that. hugs to you from Me xxxx
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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He Carol, I am twinkling, can you see me, so far away and yet so close. I could hardly get to bed before I read this. and now I will have the best sweet dreams all night long. I will be twinkling under the covers for at least a few precious hours of rest time. thank you so so much, I am honoured. I am going to print this off, and put it in a little frame next to the bed. HOw cute is that. hugs to you from Me xxxx
Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Mel
Now I am smiling...I thought you were probably already in dreamland...You should be! So I send my love and wish you the best dreams ever...Carol
Comment from asma khan
Its nicely written poem following the rules given.
The words used are good and with smooth flow.
Good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Its nicely written poem following the rules given.
The words used are good and with smooth flow.
Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Asma
Thank you...I am more of a story teller than a poet, but I like to do it once in awhile. Glad you liked it! Carol
Comment from luisestable
About this poem I like the internal vowel rhyme of the first line and the rhyming of the last two limes.
Good diction here is shown and good structure as well.
This poem makes for a good short read, and I read with delight and without any effort.
Good work!
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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About this poem I like the internal vowel rhyme of the first line and the rhyming of the last two limes.
Good diction here is shown and good structure as well.
This poem makes for a good short read, and I read with delight and without any effort.
Good work!
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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luise
I haven't written this type before...You suggest it needs adjustments...Any suggestions then? Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is a nice little Naani poem. The stars seem so far away but if you can believe they are twinkling just for you, it would make the lonely feeling go away. I love the picture you used. Only a child might imagine the stars are twinklimg just for them.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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This is a nice little Naani poem. The stars seem so far away but if you can believe they are twinkling just for you, it would make the lonely feeling go away. I love the picture you used. Only a child might imagine the stars are twinklimg just for them.
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Beth
Thanks so much for the read and for enjoying the poem. I didn't know if this is how you write a Naani or not. Thanks..Carol