Comment from rama devi

Excellent

WOW. Fantatic snow-ballerina and a perfect poetic complement to your finely crafted septolet.

Artistic, inventive and well expressed.

Loved this,

Delightful.Especially-

Winter's
diaphanous dustings (maybe just dusting...no s?)
decorate lawn

Kudos.
A very strong contender.

Warm hugs,
rd

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2009

Hi Rama, Thank you for the WOW! That is one word that always brings smiles. I thought of "dusting" and dustings when I wrote this. I originally wrote it as, " diaphanous dusting decorates lawn" I simply removed the "s" from "decorates and added it to "dusting" in the second version. Do you like the original better? Thanks for such a wonderful review. Hugs and smiles, Helvi :o)

reply by rama devi on 19-Oct-2009

I like the first one better!

:)

reply by the author on 19-Oct-2009

Thanks my friend I always appreciate your advice. :o)
Helvi :o)

Comment from jester71

Excellent

You are very talented. I like the visual of the top poem and the words drift into such a lovely snowflake poem in your second poem. I love the use of alliteration.

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 Comment Written 19-Oct-2009