POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
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Comment from lola29
Carol, you've certainly articulated the depths of pain and anguish. It is a horrible place to be, and as you say, it feels like an empty heart crying out. Excellent entry.
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Carol, you've certainly articulated the depths of pain and anguish. It is a horrible place to be, and as you say, it feels like an empty heart crying out. Excellent entry.
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Lola
Someone unknowingly rattled my cobwebs this morning and these words came tumbling out. It was a long time ago and I have moved forward and discovered so many blessings in my life. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written short poem with a smooth flow of words. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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This is a very well written short poem with a smooth flow of words. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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Charlie
Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. Caol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from BethShelby
Carol, this is a well-written Cinquain. This pretty much describes the poor girl in the picture. This is the same picture I've seen recently in another contest. Good luck in this contest.
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Carol, this is a well-written Cinquain. This pretty much describes the poor girl in the picture. This is the same picture I've seen recently in another contest. Good luck in this contest.
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Beth
She certainly depicts the sorrow...Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from Sasha
Sometimes I feel so silly counting my fingers out loud when reading a poem. All I can say is thank goodness we have ten fingers. I think this is a very strong, deeply emotional, and tragic poem. You have done a marvelous job with this one. The illustration is perfect too. Good luck with the contest.
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Sometimes I feel so silly counting my fingers out loud when reading a poem. All I can say is thank goodness we have ten fingers. I think this is a very strong, deeply emotional, and tragic poem. You have done a marvelous job with this one. The illustration is perfect too. Good luck with the contest.
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Someone shook the cobwebs this morning and these words tumbled out. It was a long time ago and I have been blessed with many things since then. Thanks for the wonderful review. Carol
Comment from gerry26
Creative, makes on think. Well written, you have told an entire story in this verse. Your words grab the soul and cry out for help. Good luck in the contest.
gerry
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Creative, makes on think. Well written, you have told an entire story in this verse. Your words grab the soul and cry out for help. Good luck in the contest.
gerry
Comment Written 10-Oct-2009
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Gerry
A simple thought this morning rattled the cobwebs deep within my brain and this words tumbled out...It was long ago and luckily I resisted and have discovered man blessings along the way. Carol
Comment from L.lora
Carole as for the construct
of the cinquain, your right
on. Wow, what a heavy duty
write. Your words are almost
haunting, they resonated
very strongly with me and as
of yet have no idea why..however
this is powerfully written and
that could account for the
feelings it evoked. no nits..Lora
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Carole as for the construct
of the cinquain, your right
on. Wow, what a heavy duty
write. Your words are almost
haunting, they resonated
very strongly with me and as
of yet have no idea why..however
this is powerfully written and
that could account for the
feelings it evoked. no nits..Lora
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Lora
An old memory was shaken lose this morning and these words came tumbling out. I have long ago moved on and count my many blessings every day. I am pleased that my words touched you. CArol
Comment from melyuki
Oh my.... what a happy soul we are this morning. This very well written cinquain speaks loud and strong and portrays a very sad and lonely soul. There doesn't leave any room in the mind , for hope. The emotions run wild, with the fear of inevitable fate in one,so low, so utterly lost. No glimmer of faith, but total self destruction. The artisty conveys the very essence of this deathly feeling. Best of luck in the contest my sweet friend and I pray this is only fiction.... luv and hugs from Mel
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Oh my.... what a happy soul we are this morning. This very well written cinquain speaks loud and strong and portrays a very sad and lonely soul. There doesn't leave any room in the mind , for hope. The emotions run wild, with the fear of inevitable fate in one,so low, so utterly lost. No glimmer of faith, but total self destruction. The artisty conveys the very essence of this deathly feeling. Best of luck in the contest my sweet friend and I pray this is only fiction.... luv and hugs from Mel
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Mel
Someone rattled an old memory this morning about the death of my son and these words came tumbling out. I have moved on from that moment of time and know that I have been given many blessing...including my friendship with you. Smiles, CArol
Comment from BJean
What a sad lonely way to die. You surely depicted this plight with emotion. How many out there are there, I wonder. Very well done cinquain. Jean
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What a sad lonely way to die. You surely depicted this plight with emotion. How many out there are there, I wonder. Very well done cinquain. Jean
Comment Written 10-Oct-2009
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Jean
With the loss of my son long ago, I was there...but luckily resisted and discovered so many blessings God bestowed upon me.
Thanks for reading and commenting. CArol
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I see now what you meant, this was your pain not the one dying. Praise Him for His Healing touch!! Jean
Comment from misscookie
Girlfriend What kind of mood were you in to write this its so sorrowful, full of grief and the face on the girl shown the black depths of help. Everything matched your words. I will not say that's the best you wrote because I know there's more coming. I would not change a single word. Keep them coming.
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Girlfriend What kind of mood were you in to write this its so sorrowful, full of grief and the face on the girl shown the black depths of help. Everything matched your words. I will not say that's the best you wrote because I know there's more coming. I would not change a single word. Keep them coming.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2009
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Cookie
Someone asked about the death of my son and it struck a chord, thus the poem. Thankfully, I resisted long ago and have found many blessings since. Thanks for the review. Carol
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I'm sorry, I too lost a son and have wrote some pieces you may have giving me the strenght to send them in one day
your amn angel
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ...
What you have written in this short work, with the syllable count all correct for the Cinquain format, is certainly a sad reality for many people who have suffered greatly in their lives.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I wish you well in the Contest.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
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Hullo Carol ...
What you have written in this short work, with the syllable count all correct for the Cinquain format, is certainly a sad reality for many people who have suffered greatly in their lives.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I wish you well in the Contest.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2009
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Nanette
Thank you for your kind response. I always appreciate hearing from you. CArol