Dear Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Dear Self"Addressing different themes in a form of a letter
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Comment from fastdigits
A very moving writing filled with
emotions of truth of looking for
yourself, who you are, and what
you are looking for.
Your words flowed down the page
in warmth, in a poignant state
of trying to find this woman who
once you were and now with determination
you are embarking on this great adventure
of once more being reunited with her.
Beautifully written and well deserving of
six stars
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
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A very moving writing filled with
emotions of truth of looking for
yourself, who you are, and what
you are looking for.
Your words flowed down the page
in warmth, in a poignant state
of trying to find this woman who
once you were and now with determination
you are embarking on this great adventure
of once more being reunited with her.
Beautifully written and well deserving of
six stars
Comment Written 19-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
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Once more I have to thank you for your generousity and for your very supportive review. I so appreciate it.
Love
Pupa
Comment from Sandara01
Interesting idea, but oh! So true! You have handled your rhyme scheme well, but I would like to see the meter tightened up. Too much variance in line length feels like stop and go traffic -- jerking the reader through the poem and detracting from the message. A couple of words stuck out as "forced" -- they didn't feel natural within the context of your work. These included: zone, finesse, and shoddy...marvelous words, but, used as they were, they stopped me.
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
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Interesting idea, but oh! So true! You have handled your rhyme scheme well, but I would like to see the meter tightened up. Too much variance in line length feels like stop and go traffic -- jerking the reader through the poem and detracting from the message. A couple of words stuck out as "forced" -- they didn't feel natural within the context of your work. These included: zone, finesse, and shoddy...marvelous words, but, used as they were, they stopped me.
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
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Thanks for your suggestions and kind review.
Love
Pupa
Comment from bookishfabler
Sometimes we should all heed your poem, and take better care of ourselves. It is very lovely, I enjoyed the letter-like form as well, I hope you have a nice vacation and you can relax and find yourself. Thanks for sharing
hugs
book
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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Sometimes we should all heed your poem, and take better care of ourselves. It is very lovely, I enjoyed the letter-like form as well, I hope you have a nice vacation and you can relax and find yourself. Thanks for sharing
hugs
book
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Thanks book, I appreciate your encouraging review, glad you liked my form.
Love
Pupa
