CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Goinup
Hello Sixteezkid
I completely agree!
Well written poem with an impassioned and very timely warning. You employed great flow and pacing. The rhyming was well done. I enjoyed it and heartily agreed.
Have a nice weekend.
Ian
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Hello Sixteezkid
I completely agree!
Well written poem with an impassioned and very timely warning. You employed great flow and pacing. The rhyming was well done. I enjoyed it and heartily agreed.
Have a nice weekend.
Ian
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from Rottie
I agree with what you said. However, I lost a 17 yr. job in 2006. It took 13 months to find another one at my age. I just lost that one two weeks ago. I have worked my entire life to pay my bills and be proud to be an American. There is no pride anymore. Like it or not, the Liberals in this country have forced us to our knees to watch us grovel for crumbs. It' s about POWER. Nothing more, nothing less. Until everyone understands that it is OUR money and stop voting in people who do not belong in office, then we all suffer. I vote for the best man as President. I don't vote for color, creed, religious beliefs. I vote for experience. The wrong man, the wrong people are in power and we are failing.
another election is coming up. If you don't educate yourself instead of being a lemming, then you deserve what you get. I'm going to lose my house and my credit at 52 yrs. old. Think I don't feel whats happening? I feel it every time I see my neighbors leaving for work, I see it every time my husband can't get up the stairs because he needs his knees replaced from 34 yrs of under ground construction and can't have the surgery because I lost my job. I see it when I ask a creditor to lower the monthly min. to help us out and they tell me I have to stop making my payments for two months before they can do that.
You tell me - What the hell is happening?
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I agree with what you said. However, I lost a 17 yr. job in 2006. It took 13 months to find another one at my age. I just lost that one two weeks ago. I have worked my entire life to pay my bills and be proud to be an American. There is no pride anymore. Like it or not, the Liberals in this country have forced us to our knees to watch us grovel for crumbs. It' s about POWER. Nothing more, nothing less. Until everyone understands that it is OUR money and stop voting in people who do not belong in office, then we all suffer. I vote for the best man as President. I don't vote for color, creed, religious beliefs. I vote for experience. The wrong man, the wrong people are in power and we are failing.
another election is coming up. If you don't educate yourself instead of being a lemming, then you deserve what you get. I'm going to lose my house and my credit at 52 yrs. old. Think I don't feel whats happening? I feel it every time I see my neighbors leaving for work, I see it every time my husband can't get up the stairs because he needs his knees replaced from 34 yrs of under ground construction and can't have the surgery because I lost my job. I see it when I ask a creditor to lower the monthly min. to help us out and they tell me I have to stop making my payments for two months before they can do that.
You tell me - What the hell is happening?
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from bard owl
Human beings aren't called sheep for nothing! We are just about as smart as wandering sheep in some areas of thinking (or rather non-thinking). Your poem is an excellent reminder that political parties do not matter. Rather, it is our allegiance to America. This one makes the reader think. Blessings, Linda
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Human beings aren't called sheep for nothing! We are just about as smart as wandering sheep in some areas of thinking (or rather non-thinking). Your poem is an excellent reminder that political parties do not matter. Rather, it is our allegiance to America. This one makes the reader think. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
You'll get no argument from me! I agree with you wholeheartedly. One does not need to be Einstein to be able to see that what they are doing is madness. You can't make money out fo nothing and buy your own debt! If that were possible, none of us would ahve any debt at all. Who invented money anway.
My country is as vulnerable as yours. There's a good chance the whole world is heading for depression. Not good. Not good at all.
Nicely written poem by the way!
Warmest wishes
Kat
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You'll get no argument from me! I agree with you wholeheartedly. One does not need to be Einstein to be able to see that what they are doing is madness. You can't make money out fo nothing and buy your own debt! If that were possible, none of us would ahve any debt at all. Who invented money anway.
My country is as vulnerable as yours. There's a good chance the whole world is heading for depression. Not good. Not good at all.
Nicely written poem by the way!
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from prodigal
Well you aren't going to find any arguement here. It took me four months to find a job. This economy is the worst since the great depression. I fear those in power do not have any discression. I am hoping they do not damage the country beyond repair. Your poem was well penned. I enjoyed it. Great work. - Sam
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Well you aren't going to find any arguement here. It took me four months to find a job. This economy is the worst since the great depression. I fear those in power do not have any discression. I am hoping they do not damage the country beyond repair. Your poem was well penned. I enjoyed it. Great work. - Sam
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from adewpearl
Sue, don't go giving people strokes!!! LOL Your rhyming quatrains have a solid cadence, solid rhymes and you make your point with clarity and conviction. I could as no more from an impassioned poem stating your beliefs. Brooke :-)
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Sue, don't go giving people strokes!!! LOL Your rhyming quatrains have a solid cadence, solid rhymes and you make your point with clarity and conviction. I could as no more from an impassioned poem stating your beliefs. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from MJMuraco
Sue, like you, I am very concerned about what is going on with our economy. I feel very insecure about my job because of the situation with General Motors. I also fear that my husband and I will lose our savings which is invested in the stock market. They can't keep printing money without causing inflation which will diminish the value of the little money we do have. It is very scary and your poem expresses your feelings well. Nicely written.
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Sue, like you, I am very concerned about what is going on with our economy. I feel very insecure about my job because of the situation with General Motors. I also fear that my husband and I will lose our savings which is invested in the stock market. They can't keep printing money without causing inflation which will diminish the value of the little money we do have. It is very scary and your poem expresses your feelings well. Nicely written.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from malachi1206
You will find no argument from me I am a patriot a defender of the Constitution and I have no qualms about the system a proven government system I have had major heartburn with who has filled the constitutionally appointed offices for the past thirty years they are criminal in my humble opinion I too will not argue my politics because I am a follower of Jesus who has told me how to approach government but I will and do write them to speak my mind sorry off my soap box a very articulate poem and excellent piece malachi1206
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You will find no argument from me I am a patriot a defender of the Constitution and I have no qualms about the system a proven government system I have had major heartburn with who has filled the constitutionally appointed offices for the past thirty years they are criminal in my humble opinion I too will not argue my politics because I am a follower of Jesus who has told me how to approach government but I will and do write them to speak my mind sorry off my soap box a very articulate poem and excellent piece malachi1206
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from dportwood
The structure and rhyming of this poem make for an easy read and the subject matter is pertinent to the present political and economic situation. I fear for our country. Our respect is gone and our leadership is stupid and corrupt. It's all about self; forget country.
Duane
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The structure and rhyming of this poem make for an easy read and the subject matter is pertinent to the present political and economic situation. I fear for our country. Our respect is gone and our leadership is stupid and corrupt. It's all about self; forget country.
Duane
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from Joan E.
I always enjoy your reflections and strong rhyme. In this poem, I also liked your "thieves in the night" simile and use of alliteration in the last stanza. The graphic and red background were quite effective as well.
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I always enjoy your reflections and strong rhyme. In this poem, I also liked your "thieves in the night" simile and use of alliteration in the last stanza. The graphic and red background were quite effective as well.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009