Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Good morning Susy and how are you doing?
This is a great haiku, very precise and powerful and descriptive message.
I enjoyed and wish you well.
Loyd

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

Comment from nora arjuna

Excellent

hi Sue, this is another great contest entry from you. I especially like the second line - very original. wish you well with this.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

lovely alliteration in the satori, and excellent flow in the first two lines; something very hard to achieve I find, and down to some very clever word choices.

Mike

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

Comment from MJMuraco

Excellent

Nice job on this Haiku. In such a few words, you gave emotion and imagery to this volcano erupting and the red color certainly made the reader feel the heat. Nice job on this!

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

Comment from amada

Excellent

You paint vivid and terrifying images in this haiku about the dormant volcano. You caught the feeling of doom and fear very well.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

Comment from chaswriter

Excellent

Sue - I like volcanos and you give us some good descriptives in this Haiku. I almost missed this one. Good luck in the contest. Charlie

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

Comment from KYPollard/El Gato

Excellent

You've managed to describe the volcano and its after effects in only a few words. Great job and what a talented writer you are. I couldn't do it! Good luck with this.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards

Excellent

One heck of Haiku. I loves volcanos! My wife, grand-daughter and I flew into the mouth of Hilo's grand mountain. We went by helicopter and felt the heat! Then follwed the lava to the ocean where it made an awfu loud "crack," when the boiling lava met the water. Thanks for rekindling the experience.

Dave

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009

Ahhh! I went in a helicopter and flew over Mauna Loa!! What a TRIP!! We followed the lava to the ocean and saw the pure black sand! Thanks for sharing your story! Awesome. And thanks for your great review. Sue :-))

Comment from findingmyroom

Excellent

I like the alliteration in the last line, plus the color scheme fits perfectly. The image of a hundred year sleep shattered by an eruption is great!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

Comment from tammipratt

Excellent

There is a great message in this piece. It was a really nice piece of poetry, with good structure. I enjoyed this. All the best in the competition.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009