The Breeding Colony
Aliens try to establish a human colony31 total reviews
Comment from Themon
Oopsie.
Though I did kind of see it coming. It's like the old joke about the last two parakeets in captivity. "G'night, Chet." "G'night, David."
Referring to "the blonde" did throw me off the scent for a moment. One doesn't usually refer to a guy as "the blonde", so that was quite effective.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Oopsie.
Though I did kind of see it coming. It's like the old joke about the last two parakeets in captivity. "G'night, Chet." "G'night, David."
Referring to "the blonde" did throw me off the scent for a moment. One doesn't usually refer to a guy as "the blonde", so that was quite effective.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Thank you. I hadn't heard the parakeet joke, but I guess there's no new story under the son. Glad you found it effective
Comment from Atheen
I loved the humour you injected in the way the aliens look at us all mighty humans. I often reflected along the same lines. I also had to chuckle at our "incredibly complicated and inefficient" reproductive cycle.
Very nice read, I wanted it to keep on going.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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I loved the humour you injected in the way the aliens look at us all mighty humans. I often reflected along the same lines. I also had to chuckle at our "incredibly complicated and inefficient" reproductive cycle.
Very nice read, I wanted it to keep on going.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Always leave them wanting more. Thank you for your review. Glad you liked it
Comment from Jonesy
Oh man! I did not see the end coming and what a treat when I got there.
It's rare for me to laugh out loud through fiction, but this had me doing exactly that.
Funny as hell.
***"Oh, that's hardly likely....*** In the first couple lines of this paragraph I count the word "them" four times.
A big deal? No, and not a mistake either so much as it was noticeable.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Oh man! I did not see the end coming and what a treat when I got there.
It's rare for me to laugh out loud through fiction, but this had me doing exactly that.
Funny as hell.
***"Oh, that's hardly likely....*** In the first couple lines of this paragraph I count the word "them" four times.
A big deal? No, and not a mistake either so much as it was noticeable.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Thanks for that. I'll revisit that para and see what I can do.
Comment from utopian_dream_x
This was a very enjoyable piece of writing that made me smile. You've written this well and I didn't spot any nits either.
utopian_dream_x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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This was a very enjoyable piece of writing that made me smile. You've written this well and I didn't spot any nits either.
utopian_dream_x
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from babylonia
LOL made me smile. made me laugh out loud. made me shake my head. yeah, who's the dummy now? all men. hmmmm .... aliens have a lot to learn.
easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. keep up the great work.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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LOL made me smile. made me laugh out loud. made me shake my head. yeah, who's the dummy now? all men. hmmmm .... aliens have a lot to learn.
easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. keep up the great work.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Thanks. I'm glad it made you laugh.
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the funny thing is that i can see this happening. then have the aliens wondering why nothing is happening.
Comment from WRITER1
I liked that to bad they forgot the females. Unless their special men there won't be any reproducing going on there.
Good job! Great fun.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I liked that to bad they forgot the females. Unless their special men there won't be any reproducing going on there.
Good job! Great fun.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Thank you. Glad you liked it
Comment from mmichelle97219
Yep without paying close attention I can see how that mistake would be made. Thanks so much for the giddgle this morning. I really needed it. Hang in there.
Michelle
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Yep without paying close attention I can see how that mistake would be made. Thanks so much for the giddgle this morning. I really needed it. Hang in there.
Michelle
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I hadn't realised I'd giddgled you, but so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review.
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my former keyboard started to rebel. New one types much better. Thanks for th GIGGLE. :-D
Michelle
Comment from Adri7enne
Big mistake, eh snodlander? Big! Huge! Got a big chuckle out of me.
Very good, well written, good imaginative little story. Hope the boys had fun!LOL
Couldn't find any spag. Just along for the ride, now.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Big mistake, eh snodlander? Big! Huge! Got a big chuckle out of me.
Very good, well written, good imaginative little story. Hope the boys had fun!LOL
Couldn't find any spag. Just along for the ride, now.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Well, a big mistake for some. for some, not so big. Thanks. Glad it got a chuckle
Comment from tkmartin
Well crafter and enjoyable to read as always. I tried to find fault to be of use, but I could not find any so just have to tell you how fabulous it was!
cheers
TK
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Well crafter and enjoyable to read as always. I tried to find fault to be of use, but I could not find any so just have to tell you how fabulous it was!
cheers
TK
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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LOL thank you.
Comment from thorney
Hi there. Very good. You don't waste a lot of ink on names, do you? Where did they get all their specimens from? I hope it wasn't LA, or Brighton!
At least two! Well, considering the divorce rates today, I guess they could get confused--you did mean that, didn't you?
Didn't see anything to report on the spag front.
A fun read, well done.
Regards, PETE.
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Hi there. Very good. You don't waste a lot of ink on names, do you? Where did they get all their specimens from? I hope it wasn't LA, or Brighton!
At least two! Well, considering the divorce rates today, I guess they could get confused--you did mean that, didn't you?
Didn't see anything to report on the spag front.
A fun read, well done.
Regards, PETE.
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Thanks for the review. I think they were unsure of the number it required, because it happens so fast and in private, it's not easy for aliens to study it well.