Comment from GregoryC

Excellent

Just when I think there are no new forms of structured poetry to master, another one pops up...this poetry form designed and constructed by Jerry P. Quinn. Quite an interesting format indeed. You did a fine job in completing it...with meaning and good use of words. Good luck in the contest.

Gregory

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2009

Comment from Marathonwriter

Excellent

Wow, Your talent continues to amaze me. The images this poem brings to my mind are quite vivid. Your word choice is excellent. Good luck in the contest. love, Chris

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2009

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

Ok, what did you do? Take a crash-course in writing poetry. I read where you say you're new to this, but you write like a pro. Excellent.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009

Yes I did take a crash-course...here on FS! Ha!! They kicked my butt into shape! Lol!! Yeah, just started writing in November. Guess it must have been bottled up for years! Not sure how much is left in there. Hope it keeps growing, though. Thanks much, Fred, for your great review and compliments. Always appreciated, Sue

reply by FredCollingwood on 19-Feb-2009

Well, your butt's in pretty good shapre--you write so well, now!

Comment from NightWriter

Excellent

"Pierced" is perfectly written and beautifully told. I can identify with this clarity pyramid. Poem has a nice rhythm from beginning to end. Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2009

Comment from debskatz

Excellent

Hey Sue,

You've been quite prolific, haven't you! Good for you. I like this poem. It's certainly an interesting picture & I think you did a good job of describing what's going on. Good luck in the contest!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009

Yes, I have been writing a bit! Go dry for a couple of days and then comes the outpouring! HA! Thanks so much for your great review and compliments. Sue

Comment from K-Patrick

Excellent

You have a talent for turning words into a beautiful flock flying across the mind's eye.

Thank you for writing.

"Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them." -- David Hume (1757)

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009

K-Patrick, your review is a poem in itself! What a lovely vision. I am always humbled by your lovely compliments. With warm regards, Sue

Comment from bluefly

Excellent

Hi Sue,
This is an excellent clarity poem. Great word choice with superb tie in to the picture and giving the reader much to ponder.
Beat of luck in the contest.
Scott

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009

bluefly, thank you so much for your very kind review and compliments. Always appreciated, Sue

Comment from steevie

Excellent

I really like clarity poems
I might try one, one day

Your thoughts and choice of words are perfect for the picture

steve

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009

Steve, I never did one before, either. Should give it a try. A great practice on being highly selective for word choices. Thanks so much for your great review. :-)) Sue

reply by steevie on 19-Feb-2009

you're very welcome. Sue
Have agreat day
steve

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

I had trouble understanding the rules of the poem but I know I liked it. Those related words are sharp and clear and I love the metaphor. Good luck in the contest.
Delora

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009

Delora, thank you for your very kind review. And compliments. Very much appreciated...Sue

Comment from findingmyroom

Excellent

Very powerful interpretation of the artwork provided. I especially like your "plant" references (withering, stems), without actually referring to the flower...

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009

Stephanie, to have your thumbs up on this means so much! So much appreciated...Sue