CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
Another intriguing form I haven't yet tried. I enjoyed your rhyme and bit of alliteration. The final line feels like a turn/twist. The title, picture and colors make it clear that this poem is focused on optimism.
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Another intriguing form I haven't yet tried. I enjoyed your rhyme and bit of alliteration. The final line feels like a turn/twist. The title, picture and colors make it clear that this poem is focused on optimism.
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Joan, the 'naani' would be right up your alley! Gotta give it a try. After reading your works for awhile, I just know you would write an excellent one. You are so precise in your word selections. You'd be a natural at haiku, senryu, naani, nonets...etc, etc. Thanks very much for your great review. Always appreciated, Sue
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Thanks again for your thoughtful encouragement--you are a great role model also.
Comment from prodigal
Very nice writing to go along with the central theme. I like the idea of persisting until one succeeds. One door closes and you search for the key to another. Well done.
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Very nice writing to go along with the central theme. I like the idea of persisting until one succeeds. One door closes and you search for the key to another. Well done.
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Comment from Brandenpaul
Well you definately have a knack for saying alot with just a few words. I liked how you took the optimistic approach to a door being slammed in one's face. Go to the next one or next opportunity. Nicely done-as usual.
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Well you definately have a knack for saying alot with just a few words. I liked how you took the optimistic approach to a door being slammed in one's face. Go to the next one or next opportunity. Nicely done-as usual.
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jbourdeau, yes, there is always another door. We only need to search for it (and sometimes with some patience! - ha). Thank you for your great compliments and very kind review. Always appreciated Sue
Comment from findingmyroom
I like the optimistic tone in your poem, and that opportunity is created by one's own actions. "Knob turn yields futility" is my favorite line, as it shows that trying to return to old ways is not the best path.
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I like the optimistic tone in your poem, and that opportunity is created by one's own actions. "Knob turn yields futility" is my favorite line, as it shows that trying to return to old ways is not the best path.
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Yes, sometimes doors close and we cannot look back with regret or try to hang on. Gotta move on. And for some odd reason, it always works out! HA! Thanks so much for your great review. Sue
Comment from RapturedHeart
Oh, this is excellent, Sixteezkid! A new way to say the old adage - when one door closes ...
The older I get, the more I realize that life is to be lived 'offensively' and not 'defensively'; with 'motion' instead of 'passivity'. Very well done. Wish you all the best in the contest,
heather
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Oh, this is excellent, Sixteezkid! A new way to say the old adage - when one door closes ...
The older I get, the more I realize that life is to be lived 'offensively' and not 'defensively'; with 'motion' instead of 'passivity'. Very well done. Wish you all the best in the contest,
heather
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
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Heather, you are right. "offensive vs. defensive" is a great way to put it. And to be passive is basically not allowing oneself to be a participant in one's own life. Doors always close and must seize the day (as they say, carpe diem). I don't think those words can be overused. Thanks very much for your very kind review, Sue
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This might be short and
sweet, Sue, but the words
say it all - speaking volumes.
Cleverly thoughtout, complemented
with an apt picture.
Good luck with the contest.
Margaret
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This might be short and
sweet, Sue, but the words
say it all - speaking volumes.
Cleverly thoughtout, complemented
with an apt picture.
Good luck with the contest.
Margaret
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Comment from rmdelta
sue, well alrighty then, my friend. another of these, huh? this writing did come across quite easily and I could understand it perfectly. Good luck in the contest, Sue.
Reggie
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sue, well alrighty then, my friend. another of these, huh? this writing did come across quite easily and I could understand it perfectly. Good luck in the contest, Sue.
Reggie
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
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Yeah, a 'naani' can remind you of...say..a grandmother. HA! But glad you enjoyed this weird-named poem. Thanks for our well-wishes and very kind review. Sue :-))
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This poem has a lot of depth. I love the message of the work. Another door opens when one closes but one needs to have the key. However, i believe that God often opens it by himself. kudos
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This poem has a lot of depth. I love the message of the work. Another door opens when one closes but one needs to have the key. However, i believe that God often opens it by himself. kudos
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Comment from grassroots08
They say if you knock and the door doesn't open up for you to just go looking for more doors to knock on. Well you have gone the extra mile. That door that won't open, why not find the key and open it ourselves - very good. Cheers, Don
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They say if you knock and the door doesn't open up for you to just go looking for more doors to knock on. Well you have gone the extra mile. That door that won't open, why not find the key and open it ourselves - very good. Cheers, Don
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Comment from glacierbabe
Your description of perserverace comes through very nicely. It is amazing that so few words can say so much. Very well written.
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Your description of perserverace comes through very nicely. It is amazing that so few words can say so much. Very well written.
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