CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Jazh
This is a lovely poem, matched with beautiful artwork. I particularly like the second line: "courtship's august adornment" with its play on words and alliteration. Good luck with the contest. :)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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This is a lovely poem, matched with beautiful artwork. I particularly like the second line: "courtship's august adornment" with its play on words and alliteration. Good luck with the contest. :)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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I love to watch various animals' mating behaviours. Fascinating! Thanks for your compliments and great review! Sue
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue.
This may present better (haiku does IMHO) if edited ta 'center-text'. Also, though no eepert I'm nos sure about the use of 'bedroom'. I dunno what thae fancy term is but something ta do with personification, I think. Al will know ;-) I may be wrong. Maybe 'romance'? Mind you, I doubt anyone else will bring it up. Fantastic picture ta accompany stunning imagery and humour satori. Top notch! Love, Ray xx
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Hi, Sue.
This may present better (haiku does IMHO) if edited ta 'center-text'. Also, though no eepert I'm nos sure about the use of 'bedroom'. I dunno what thae fancy term is but something ta do with personification, I think. Al will know ;-) I may be wrong. Maybe 'romance'? Mind you, I doubt anyone else will bring it up. Fantastic picture ta accompany stunning imagery and humour satori. Top notch! Love, Ray xx
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Who is Domino? Hmmm. Oh! YEAH!! Geez, almost forgot you already! ( I'm so bad...) - You always have to remind me to center my haiku. What's up with me? Lost without you, that's what!! I see what you mean about the 'bedroom' eyes, but like it so much (must be my dying for romance right now - ha!), so will leave it for awhile and see how it flies. Thanks much for your review, Ray. LOVE hearing from you! :-)) Sue
Comment from Judian James
Good one Sue! I love the last line. Aren't peacocks amazing? I've only seen a few in my lifetime but always speechless to be around one. excellent
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Good one Sue! I love the last line. Aren't peacocks amazing? I've only seen a few in my lifetime but always speechless to be around one. excellent
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Aren't they gorgeous! Nature is glorious. Mating rituals are especially fascinating to me. Thanks for your review, Jude. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from MJMuraco
Your haiku was very creative and nicely written. I thank you for the author notes which educated me about the peacock and their mating. It is truly interesting how the feathers have the eye.
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Your haiku was very creative and nicely written. I thank you for the author notes which educated me about the peacock and their mating. It is truly interesting how the feathers have the eye.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
Comment from Roisin
This is a fantastic haiku, Sue. Looks like you put lots of work into getting those words just right. The alliteration is great and your words are just beautiful. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards.
Roisin
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This is a fantastic haiku, Sue. Looks like you put lots of work into getting those words just right. The alliteration is great and your words are just beautiful. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
Comment from NightWriter
"A Summer Fling" is a beautifully written and educational poem to read. Birds also can see in the ultraviolet, so some colors we can't see, they see brighter. Birds are amazing. Well done.
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"A Summer Fling" is a beautifully written and educational poem to read. Birds also can see in the ultraviolet, so some colors we can't see, they see brighter. Birds are amazing. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
Comment from Dreamdancer
Big smile,
Very beautiful write and great information in the Author notes. Makes one wonder, in the animal kingdom males are always trying to impress the female... Come to think about it, don't men flare out their chests when trying to impress a woman? Could we be that obvious? LOL... Great write my friend... Dreamdancer
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Big smile,
Very beautiful write and great information in the Author notes. Makes one wonder, in the animal kingdom males are always trying to impress the female... Come to think about it, don't men flare out their chests when trying to impress a woman? Could we be that obvious? LOL... Great write my friend... Dreamdancer
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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chests out, eyebrow raised, flexing biceps, bit of cool attitude - LOL!! And we women love it!! Thanks so much for your great and fun review! Sue
Comment from joan marie
They are very loud and don't care what time of the day or night it is. Love the subjet matter and the artwork is lovely. joan marie
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They are very loud and don't care what time of the day or night it is. Love the subjet matter and the artwork is lovely. joan marie
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
Comment from Cedar
Nice piece. You did a great job on this type of poetry and this is one subject I know about. My neighbor had several peacocks for years.
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Nice piece. You did a great job on this type of poetry and this is one subject I know about. My neighbor had several peacocks for years.
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2009