CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 136 "An Opening"A collection of poetry
42 total reviews
Comment from flea0420
You have good form. It's difficult to let love back in and let defenses down. "to build defenses - safer ground" I also enjoyed the repetition of "craving, craving, my heart pounds."
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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You have good form. It's difficult to let love back in and let defenses down. "to build defenses - safer ground" I also enjoyed the repetition of "craving, craving, my heart pounds."
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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flea, thanks for highlighting the phrases you liked. And for your most kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Poet Gone Mad
I really liked the tone of this. To me it held a tint of darkness to it, but not over the top. The flow was really cool. I enjoyed how you used the first two lines to end it as well. It really made a powerful ending.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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I really liked the tone of this. To me it held a tint of darkness to it, but not over the top. The flow was really cool. I enjoyed how you used the first two lines to end it as well. It really made a powerful ending.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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NDFan, thanks again for reading my work and for your very generous review. And am so glad you liked it! With regards, Sue
Comment from ulster3
Hello Siteez.
I did like this work, and it is iamb. I used that picture before, isn't it wonderful! I like the repetive line very much. fondly, rebecca
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Hello Siteez.
I did like this work, and it is iamb. I used that picture before, isn't it wonderful! I like the repetive line very much. fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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It is a GREAT picture, yes! When I saw it, I just knew it was perfect for what I wanted to convey. Thanks so much for your very generous review and specific comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from AndStuff
Wow. This is amazing. I can completely and totally relate to the boundaries this poem talks about. I'm still waiting to that exception to the rule. Nice work!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Wow. This is amazing. I can completely and totally relate to the boundaries this poem talks about. I'm still waiting to that exception to the rule. Nice work!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2008
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Ha!! Believe me, it's just around a corner somewhere...and just when you least expect it...! So glad you enjoyed this poem. And you made me laugh! With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from dportwood
Sixteezkid,
May not be a triolet, but it is structured poetry and nicely done with the rhyming scheme and rhythm. Easy and pleasant to read.
Duane
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Sixteezkid,
May not be a triolet, but it is structured poetry and nicely done with the rhyming scheme and rhythm. Easy and pleasant to read.
Duane
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Duane, thanks for your very kind review. Glad you enjoyed this work! With regards, Sue
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Breaking the rule or not, this is a wonderful poem.
Beautifully executed and easy to read. I found no errors here. Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Breaking the rule or not, this is a wonderful poem.
Beautifully executed and easy to read. I found no errors here. Good job.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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El Gate, so glad you liked this work! I always welcome your very honest reviews, as you have been a great help in my steep learning curve. Thank you for this great review and very kind remarks. With regards, Sue
Comment from LadyMary
Interesting format. Poem projects a very good image of letting that door stay ajar. Good rhyme makes for a very smooth reading. One is left wondering if making that exception will make magic...Well done. LadyMary
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Interesting format. Poem projects a very good image of letting that door stay ajar. Good rhyme makes for a very smooth reading. One is left wondering if making that exception will make magic...Well done. LadyMary
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Pffft...rules are made to be broken. This is extremely well-written, not long and drawn out, and says what the author intended it to say. I AM impressed.
Pea
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Pffft...rules are made to be broken. This is extremely well-written, not long and drawn out, and says what the author intended it to say. I AM impressed.
Pea
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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LOVE the "pffft"!!! So much said in those few letters - HA!! But, means a lot because as I walk up this hill of learning, I'm getting a bit of confidence to break a few rules. Ahhhh...now I can breathe! Very kind review and I appreciate your most honest and specific comments! So glad you liked it. Sue
Comment from rama devi
Hey, this is excellent! Would have made a great entry into the short love poem contest. Brilliant combination of artwork, metaphor and style. Love the honesty and the use of the musically repetitive triolet form. No nits. A fine work.
Bravo!
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Hey, this is excellent! Would have made a great entry into the short love poem contest. Brilliant combination of artwork, metaphor and style. Love the honesty and the use of the musically repetitive triolet form. No nits. A fine work.
Bravo!
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Hi rama devi, I didn't see that particular contest. Oh, well. Just as long as I can keep on writing!! Thank you SO much for your most kind review. And for the 'bravo', I am ecstatic!! Ha! Much appreciated and with warmest regards, Sue
Comment from minopavlic
Simply breathtaking. Beautifully crafted poem where the author takes us to ponder not only our own feelings of self worth,and insecurities within those haunting demons in us that we all hide from. The author expressed not only the uniqueness of her talent as a poet, but as well her inner beauty.
Quite possibly within this metaphorical poem of pure genius, if not brilliance, I've found the answers to my own fears of expectations, which in themselves place great emotional demands upon me, and at times I find that the price seems just too high for even me too overcome.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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Simply breathtaking. Beautifully crafted poem where the author takes us to ponder not only our own feelings of self worth,and insecurities within those haunting demons in us that we all hide from. The author expressed not only the uniqueness of her talent as a poet, but as well her inner beauty.
Quite possibly within this metaphorical poem of pure genius, if not brilliance, I've found the answers to my own fears of expectations, which in themselves place great emotional demands upon me, and at times I find that the price seems just too high for even me too overcome.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2008
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no_obstacle, your review is most humbling. And I say that from my heart. For my own, deepest thoughts to be felt like you have described, is the biggest prize of all. Thank you for this most beautiful review, as I have been touched. With warmest regards, Sue