The Nights of Castle Fair
Multiple Tetractys: Recalling Childhood Summer48 total reviews
Comment from Vennan
This is fabulous and should be a strong, strong contender in the contest! (And congratulations on your Poem Of The Month win!)
Just one tweak to suggest -- an errant comma that snuck in.
You wrote: the infamous, "Flashlight
I suggest: the infamous "Flashlight
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All the best,
Vennan (who loves fireflies and misses them, now that she lives out West)
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2007
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This is fabulous and should be a strong, strong contender in the contest! (And congratulations on your Poem Of The Month win!)
Just one tweak to suggest -- an errant comma that snuck in.
You wrote: the infamous, "Flashlight
I suggest: the infamous "Flashlight
= = =
All the best,
Vennan (who loves fireflies and misses them, now that she lives out West)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2007
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Hello Friend! Darn little commas....but really damn eyesight! Thank you so much for your kind review and compliment! Take Care....diane
Comment from jamdownjenny
Hello Mrs. KT,
Thanks for sharing this beautiful memory of childhood and summer, It made for a very interesting read.
Your thoughts and ideas flowed and the message came through loud and clear.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep on writing and posting.
Jamdownjenny
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2007
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Hello Mrs. KT,
Thanks for sharing this beautiful memory of childhood and summer, It made for a very interesting read.
Your thoughts and ideas flowed and the message came through loud and clear.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep on writing and posting.
Jamdownjenny
Comment Written 24-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2007
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You are so kind! Thank you for your wonderful review...iane
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
This is simply wonderful-- full of life and childhood dreams. The imagery was excellent and the flow carried the reader from beginning to end... Good luck with the contest for in my simply opinion this is a winner... Dancing in Dreams
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2007
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Hello my friend,
This is simply wonderful-- full of life and childhood dreams. The imagery was excellent and the flow carried the reader from beginning to end... Good luck with the contest for in my simply opinion this is a winner... Dancing in Dreams
Comment Written 24-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2007
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Hello Friend! Thank you for your wonderful review and kind thoughts. Such wonderful memories...diane
Comment from mshugh
You spin a marvellous image of childhood - the pretend castles, the ghost stories, the muffled guggling (that's my imagination at work there), the camarderie that comes with good friends
Very nicely done - after reading the author's notes, I think you've hit the format bang on
Michael
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2007
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You spin a marvellous image of childhood - the pretend castles, the ghost stories, the muffled guggling (that's my imagination at work there), the camarderie that comes with good friends
Very nicely done - after reading the author's notes, I think you've hit the format bang on
Michael
Comment Written 23-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2007
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Hello Michael! Kind words - wonderful review. Much appreciation! diane
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Hello Michael! Kind words - wonderful review. Much appreciation! diane
Comment from blue_december
This is an amazing, wonderfully written piece. The story is adorable. The sweet innocent times of long ago had me daydreaming myself. Very nice. Love your picture too by the way. You're darling. ~blue_december~
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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This is an amazing, wonderfully written piece. The story is adorable. The sweet innocent times of long ago had me daydreaming myself. Very nice. Love your picture too by the way. You're darling. ~blue_december~
Comment Written 23-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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Thank you so much for your kind review, blue_december. I so enjoyed penning this piece, but I had the most difficult time finding a picture to express what I hoped my piece conveyed. Do stop by again! diane
Comment from MLMotley
This is beautiful - both in shapely form, memory-stirring picture, and the fantastic innocence and wonder of long-lost youth. THIS is what many of today's youths miss. Excellent poem. Excellent lesson on how things are meant to be. MMWyrm
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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This is beautiful - both in shapely form, memory-stirring picture, and the fantastic innocence and wonder of long-lost youth. THIS is what many of today's youths miss. Excellent poem. Excellent lesson on how things are meant to be. MMWyrm
Comment Written 23-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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Hello! Thank you for stopping by and for your thoughtful review. Wonderful memories! diane
Comment from DawningOne
What a great poem. It totally took me back to the days of sheet tents hung over the wash line. It was a magical time. I wish kids now a days could experience a little bit, of what it's like to use your imagination. Great poem here. Thanks for the trip in time to better days gone by. God bless you.
Much love,
Dawn
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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What a great poem. It totally took me back to the days of sheet tents hung over the wash line. It was a magical time. I wish kids now a days could experience a little bit, of what it's like to use your imagination. Great poem here. Thanks for the trip in time to better days gone by. God bless you.
Much love,
Dawn
Comment Written 23-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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Oh Dawn! Am so pleased you enjoyed my offering. What wonderful memories. Have yet to contact your editor friend, but I will asap. Take Care...diane
Comment from Kingsland
I like the way that you formatted this piece of poetry
Good formatting choice will only tend to enhance a piece of poetry
this poem was well written with good imagery scattered through out the entire piece
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed this well written verse... John
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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I like the way that you formatted this piece of poetry
Good formatting choice will only tend to enhance a piece of poetry
this poem was well written with good imagery scattered through out the entire piece
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed this well written verse... John
Comment Written 23-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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Hello John! So pleased you enjoyed. The tetractys format is my favorite, and I have no idea why other than words and phrases just seem to fit so well...Take Care....diane
Comment from Moira's Amethyst
"When fireflies dance
in the heat of the night, and the air is
filled with the sweet smell of lilacs"
The picture was well chosen and author notes helped a lot. The poem itself was very interestingly put. Very creative and vivid. Great write!
Best wishes~Kaff ~|: > )
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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"When fireflies dance
in the heat of the night, and the air is
filled with the sweet smell of lilacs"
The picture was well chosen and author notes helped a lot. The poem itself was very interestingly put. Very creative and vivid. Great write!
Best wishes~Kaff ~|: > )
Comment Written 23-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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So pleased you enjoyed my offering! Wonderful memories and friends... diane
Comment from G.B. Smith
I
smile to
remember
long ago days
of flashlights, innocence, and Castle Fair.
Diane, this is just superb.
I reflect on the times of my childhood of over 50 years as well with glee. I am sorry that I am not able to re-construct it as supremely as you have done here. Oh those were the days weren't they
Bear
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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I
smile to
remember
long ago days
of flashlights, innocence, and Castle Fair.
Diane, this is just superb.
I reflect on the times of my childhood of over 50 years as well with glee. I am sorry that I am not able to re-construct it as supremely as you have done here. Oh those were the days weren't they
Bear
Comment Written 23-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2007
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Oh Bear! Am so pleased you enjoyed my offering! Those were great times! Thank you so much...diane