Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from Misty19
I really loved the imagery presented to the reader...it created a a mythical and rich mood. Ultimately, there are not many suggestions I would make for this piece, as I find it to be well written.
My only constructive criticism is with the rhythm...might be better executed with some additional punctuation, but as I stated, certainly not necessary...and I myself would be torn to add it.
Very Well Done!!!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
I really loved the imagery presented to the reader...it created a a mythical and rich mood. Ultimately, there are not many suggestions I would make for this piece, as I find it to be well written.
My only constructive criticism is with the rhythm...might be better executed with some additional punctuation, but as I stated, certainly not necessary...and I myself would be torn to add it.
Very Well Done!!!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
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I'll take another peek at the punctuation. Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from G.B. Smith
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Jewell, If I had a 6th star left I'd give it to you. I love the picture. It frames so well your poem.
Anticipation can be yours
If you imagine nature's music
While your soul
takes its first dance step
I am reminded of the movie, Shall we dance. You really did well
Bear
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
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Jewell, If I had a 6th star left I'd give it to you. I love the picture. It frames so well your poem.
Anticipation can be yours
If you imagine nature's music
While your soul
takes its first dance step
I am reminded of the movie, Shall we dance. You really did well
Bear
Comment Written 20-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
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Aww, you are always so kind. Where's that star? lol I reread this and thought it was just so so...but thanks, I 'll keep it this way.
Thats me, Mr. So & So
Comment from KING SLATON
You have tapped into a gold mine of emotional expression recently for whatever reason and it shines in all of your recent poetry.
Excellent work Jewell.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
You have tapped into a gold mine of emotional expression recently for whatever reason and it shines in all of your recent poetry.
Excellent work Jewell.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
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They come and go KING. Thanks so much.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Very lovely piece with awesome imagery. The flow is quite good. Fourth verse is my favorite...Much enjoyed this fine writing. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
Very lovely piece with awesome imagery. The flow is quite good. Fourth verse is my favorite...Much enjoyed this fine writing. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
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It's great to hear from you Susanne! Thanks.
Comment from Swtdreamz
Just as a sunrise
Welcomes a new day
An enlightenment
Waits behind the scenes - lovely lines- I like to learn new things everyday and discover new theories, etc
A unique perspective waits
In the setting sun - i am so bad with drawing perspective- but better at understanding it
While your soul
takes its first dance step- a cautious step to move the tide
good job
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
Just as a sunrise
Welcomes a new day
An enlightenment
Waits behind the scenes - lovely lines- I like to learn new things everyday and discover new theories, etc
A unique perspective waits
In the setting sun - i am so bad with drawing perspective- but better at understanding it
While your soul
takes its first dance step- a cautious step to move the tide
good job
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2007
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:-) and sweet dreams to you too. Thanks.